Like men, all women exaggerate.
All men were roughly the same size.
Great use of foreshadowing. The linkage is terrific.
I do seem surprised there weren't two rounds...to give the guys the thought they might have had both the other two wives.
GrandTeton took a story I wrote and he edited, flipped it, and improved it tremendously. He asked my permission before posting, and I gladly gave it. I like a good story, and if someone can take something of mine and make it better, I love it! Good job, sir!
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Perfect
Perfect. This shows other writers how not to rush a story.
I do have one question: how did she tell that his eyes "dulled" under the cotton and blindfold?
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Mona Lisa: Phoebe's View
Like men, all women exaggerate.
All men were roughly the same size.
Great use of foreshadowing. The linkage is terrific.
I do seem surprised there weren't two rounds...to give the guys the thought they might have had both the other two wives.
Excellent job
GrandTeton took a story I wrote and he edited, flipped it, and improved it tremendously. He asked my permission before posting, and I gladly gave it. I like a good story, and if someone can take something of mine and make it better, I love it! Good job, sir!
Perfect
Perfect. This shows other writers how not to rush a story.
I do have one question: how did she tell that his eyes "dulled" under the cotton and blindfold?
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