When I read the first story in this series, I never thought would grow into my favorite story in all you have written so far, but it's certainly turned out that way. This story/character, just keeps getting better and better, so I hope you will be posting additional installments soon.
If you continue this, as you surely must, there are too many dangling story lines here, then I beg you, find a way to link the story titles, as it is hard to recognise successor stories from the morass of Lit stories: we have the Shepherd, Jack, though, I'm not sure what you can do - I can't think of a solution.
As I see it we have 6 babies on the way, the triplets, Tristam's, possibly Angie and Isabel, there will be drama over the timing of Tristram's baby and the reveal - it had better be after Grace's children - and we have to rescue Victoria's children. You have left a few dangling women about too...
Read the first on in a day and was Hooked. Realized this was a continuation, and didn't sleep(36h again) and just loved it. This time there are a lot more Possible Threads to use to continue the story, Specially with all the Ladies that he Loves and Help and the few New ones on the way. Love how you once again game a Read story with good Pacing and did NOT leave us with a damned Cliffhanger! Thank you again and Keep up the AMAZING AND AWESOME INSANITY! (no one who claims to be Sane is normal. or creative. Sane is the lack of em.)
Wow I loved the first one and this didn't disappoint. So glad there are more updates from one of my favorite authors on this site!
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Anonymous01/11/16
A wonderful sequel
Thank you for this lovely piece of work. Once again I was hooked and read non-stop until completion. I can only hope you decide to continue this story in the future. I look forward to reading more.
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Anonymous01/12/16
Another great story
First off, I think you are the only author on Lit who I have read everything they have done that wasn't limited to a single line. Considering your body of work currently sits at around 220 pages, with three continuous stories and a few one offs, that is saying something.
Second, I love the pacing in this story. Every woman in Ed's life, he was able to step up and help fight their demons. Some demons remain, such as Victoria's, but you seem to have set those battles up in the future.
I was surprised not to see Shirley at all. Would love to see her, as Ed's personal demon, be battled by Ed's ladies.
Hopefully this is not the end of Ed's adventures. Looking forward to more.
Unintended ... Can We Get More Unintended Sequels?
Another masterpiece to read. Thank you so much. I was actually checking your profile on accident when I noticed the new sequel. Took a couple hours, but was well worth the read. Him fixing so many demons, was a bit unbelievable, but it was Christmas and a time for miracles. I truly loved how each instance had a new twist. You're a creative writer. I have already read the original 3 times so iam sure this one will be read that many times soon too. Like others I hope there is more for this polyarmorus group, especially need to see Ed confront Shirley or at least find out what happens to her with Jerry given how demanding she is for her sperm treatments. Not to mention Tristan placing Dale's hand on her belly, the tell tale sign of her future. I hope that Ed gets to learnof her transgression, though I'm sure he would forgive her quickly. Great piece of writing, keep it up please.
Both of the stories are well written, with much better than average attention to detail of the story line. So many, very interesting, events in each, that it is surprising to find them each carried to conclusion without any jarring effect to the over arching story!
Well done, and I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future.
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Anonymous01/18/16
Not enough people pregnant ; )
I like the story and the one before it. I was just kidding about not enough pregnancies but it wouldn't be so bad
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Anonymous01/27/16
i think we need a third to end on a great note. both tales have been outstanding thus far. just some loose ends to clear up like cluing in ed on the 4th baby, the bedding victoria, and isabelle finally getting pretty much all of it in without passing out immediately. just looking for the happily ever after ending i guess.
Outstanding as per your usual writing! Some might complain of length, but I enjoy the volume you put into these stories. So keep writing what makes YOU happy because it puts a smile on many of our faces.
As for the story of Grace and Ed, I know you can fill in the minutiae on your own so well, and in my mind the remainder of the story might play out like this...
Grace has triplets, two girls and a boy. Tristan and Dale have a son as well. As the years progress (insert minutiae) Mr. Drakos retires from daily work and Ed and Lydia take over the business as partners. In Ed's eyes Rachel just gets more elegant with time and she continues to be a friend, lover, partner parent, and even mothering figure to Grace in a way Shirley never was (insert minutiae). Grace finishes school and becomes successful in her own right, gaining a mature confidence from the combination of Ed's unwavering love and (insert minutiae) Rachel's pride in her 'surrogate daughter'. Eventually Dale succumbs to age/terminal medical condition and asks Ed to promise to look after Tristan and their son, because he knows Ed will love them with no reservations and he doesn't want to leave Tristan alone. Dale leaves everything to Tristan but her she doesn't care about the money because her biggest fear is losing him and then being alone. Grace and Ed promise Dale to look after his family, and then Dale introduces his son to his real father and half-brother before he passes away. Tristan and Son become part of Ed/Grace/Rachel's even more extended family. The other ladies continue to be part of their lives. One of them might be lost in a surprisingly tragic manner to serve as an emotional apex for the story if it happened in a way that Ed was involved but could not save her. Insert more minutiae as required, lol.
Man, look at the time! Am I still rambling?In any case, whether it involves these characters or not, I look forward to your next story.
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Anonymous02/01/16
Can I have a real life Ed?
This is so hot. Do men like Ed exist in real life?
I need one badly
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Anonymous02/04/16
Movie ?
Try writing a few screen plays...
244 Jake
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Anonymous02/04/16
Lovely story
This has a little bit of Forest Gump in it. Everything/evryone he touches turns out well. Good writing.
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Anonymous02/09/16
please keep this going! I'm in my mid 60's and I hope it continues into my 70's! love all the interactons.
More, more!
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Anonymous02/11/16
Great story
I really like the story and writing, and would like to read more.
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Anonymous02/13/16
Well done!
I admire the skill taken here. Each character has a fully developed story and motivation. The plot and genuine warmth keeps you entertained, not just the physicality. Well done!
The beauty of this series is how amazing you have written the individuality of each character and how they interact. How Ed loves each for their own reasons, and the fact that tou have left future story elements for sequels excites me, i NEED more of these. Please, i can only re-read these so many times.
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Anonymous03/15/16
Amazing!!!
Thanks so much BurntRedstone this is a great series. Can't wait for more!
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Anonymous03/17/16
Great
i love that this story is good enough it didn't need the sex scenes to be good, very well written,
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Anonymous03/19/16
Great Read
I have enjoyed both of the stories about Ed and the ladies. I believe you have a real talent and will enjoy any future additions to this tale. I will also be reading the rest of your stories as well based upon the entertainment provided in these two. Thanks.
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Anonymous03/22/16
Repetetive and boring
Interchangeable, shallow, needy women, 2-dimensional bad guys (most other men), and a "hero" who stumbles through life cock-first. Yawn.
This story is amazing and so well written! That you've taken the time to keep everyone and more in the story is brilliant! Then there's the love, your story made me cry in a few endearing parts... It's so well done, I only hope that's there's more to this very compelling and addictive story!
Thank you so much for sharing it with us!
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Anonymous04/01/16
A good sequel, but Ed's drinking habits made him look like third stage alcoholic. My uncle was like that. He drunk only a little and only in a good spirits - until he was silly drunk at the end. Like Ed. Died when he was 45, also drinking. So in a way this story isn't so good. Especially for younger people, who could find your mentioned scotch fascinating to their deaths.
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Anonymous04/09/16
BurntRedstone, I like the cut of your jib. This is really great writing and I can't wait to read part 3.
I really enjoyed this story line and hope you consider more installments with these characters. Ed is such a likeable person you really bring him and all the women alive.
Another lovely story......but you could have narrated what happened about Tristan and her baby........do they tell Ed or does Rachel reveal the secret
Anyway........ That was a fantastic story..... Thanks for sharing.*****x5
Sorry for being demanding but SEQUEL!
This has become one of my favourite stories on here and if possible a sequel that ties up or give closure to us will be greatly appreciated.
Seriously Ed x Isabelle needs more screen time. If memory serves me correctly, she has only been in 2 sex scenes so far.
Nice story of polyamory that works for Ed and the women. I haven't read any of your other stories, but I'll have to check them out. Thank you.
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Anonymous06/08/16
Love these characters...
Realised there was a part two to the first story and read it today. Love love love these characters. My favourites are Ed and Rachel...but I still live the others also. Please write more about them. Great writing and great characters.... Want more...lol
but it was almost too much of a good thing.
Definitely over the top.
Some of Ed's behaviour was that of one mildly on the autistic spectrum.
But there can be no disputing this was very entertaining.
With the Jack, the Shepherds and Ed you have your work cut out keeping us entertained: if there are no sequels soon on any or all these stories we will hunt ypu down and chain you to your word processor until you cough up more...
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Anonymous06/27/16
MORE PLEASE!!
Why are these not a book?! Please, PLEASE keep writing! I just read your stories for 8 hours straight!!!
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Anonymous06/28/16
SO AWESOME
I love it , i wonder if they will all move into the same house or go on a trip all of them or mannnn i dunno so awesome.
English
Excellent!!
When I read the first story in this series, I never thought would grow into my favorite story in all you have written so far, but it's certainly turned out that way. This story/character, just keeps getting better and better, so I hope you will be posting additional installments soon.
Thanks, for all your efforts!
Please keep the installments coming. Wonderful story!
Please continue...
If you continue this, as you surely must, there are too many dangling story lines here, then I beg you, find a way to link the story titles, as it is hard to recognise successor stories from the morass of Lit stories: we have the Shepherd, Jack, though, I'm not sure what you can do - I can't think of a solution.
As I see it we have 6 babies on the way, the triplets, Tristam's, possibly Angie and Isabel, there will be drama over the timing of Tristram's baby and the reveal - it had better be after Grace's children - and we have to rescue Victoria's children. You have left a few dangling women about too...
Good luck
AWESOME...often an overused word...but NOT in this case!
Sure hope you write more on this. Your continuing stories are really great...love them!!!
Unbelievably AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Read the first on in a day and was Hooked. Realized this was a continuation, and didn't sleep(36h again) and just loved it. This time there are a lot more Possible Threads to use to continue the story, Specially with all the Ladies that he Loves and Help and the few New ones on the way. Love how you once again game a Read story with good Pacing and did NOT leave us with a damned Cliffhanger! Thank you again and Keep up the AMAZING AND AWESOME INSANITY! (no one who claims to be Sane is normal. or creative. Sane is the lack of em.)
Yessssssss it's back!
Wow I loved the first one and this didn't disappoint. So glad there are more updates from one of my favorite authors on this site!
A wonderful sequel
Thank you for this lovely piece of work. Once again I was hooked and read non-stop until completion. I can only hope you decide to continue this story in the future. I look forward to reading more.
Another great story
First off, I think you are the only author on Lit who I have read everything they have done that wasn't limited to a single line. Considering your body of work currently sits at around 220 pages, with three continuous stories and a few one offs, that is saying something.
Second, I love the pacing in this story. Every woman in Ed's life, he was able to step up and help fight their demons. Some demons remain, such as Victoria's, but you seem to have set those battles up in the future.
I was surprised not to see Shirley at all. Would love to see her, as Ed's personal demon, be battled by Ed's ladies.
Hopefully this is not the end of Ed's adventures. Looking forward to more.
TayJK
Tayjk42@gmail.com
Unintended ... Can We Get More Unintended Sequels?
Another masterpiece to read. Thank you so much. I was actually checking your profile on accident when I noticed the new sequel. Took a couple hours, but was well worth the read. Him fixing so many demons, was a bit unbelievable, but it was Christmas and a time for miracles. I truly loved how each instance had a new twist. You're a creative writer. I have already read the original 3 times so iam sure this one will be read that many times soon too. Like others I hope there is more for this polyarmorus group, especially need to see Ed confront Shirley or at least find out what happens to her with Jerry given how demanding she is for her sperm treatments. Not to mention Tristan placing Dale's hand on her belly, the tell tale sign of her future. I hope that Ed gets to learnof her transgression, though I'm sure he would forgive her quickly. Great piece of writing, keep it up please.
Another home run great story
Awesome
This story is great. I think it changed my life. I loved it.
WOW
OMG what a fantastic sequel!!! Loved every second of it ;)
The Best
One of, but I think the best story on this site.... Truely remarkable... Well done and I hope Ed and the Girls come back....
Excellent story
Excellent story. Just wanted to point out Tristen changes to Tristan part way through.
Great depth
Both of the stories are well written, with much better than average attention to detail of the story line. So many, very interesting, events in each, that it is surprising to find them each carried to conclusion without any jarring effect to the over arching story!
Well done, and I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future.
Not enough people pregnant ; )
I like the story and the one before it. I was just kidding about not enough pregnancies but it wouldn't be so bad
i think we need a third to end on a great note. both tales have been outstanding thus far. just some loose ends to clear up like cluing in ed on the 4th baby, the bedding victoria, and isabelle finally getting pretty much all of it in without passing out immediately. just looking for the happily ever after ending i guess.
Excellent, needs 3rd chapter to wrap...
Outstanding as per your usual writing! Some might complain of length, but I enjoy the volume you put into these stories. So keep writing what makes YOU happy because it puts a smile on many of our faces.
As for the story of Grace and Ed, I know you can fill in the minutiae on your own so well, and in my mind the remainder of the story might play out like this...
Grace has triplets, two girls and a boy. Tristan and Dale have a son as well. As the years progress (insert minutiae) Mr. Drakos retires from daily work and Ed and Lydia take over the business as partners. In Ed's eyes Rachel just gets more elegant with time and she continues to be a friend, lover, partner parent, and even mothering figure to Grace in a way Shirley never was (insert minutiae). Grace finishes school and becomes successful in her own right, gaining a mature confidence from the combination of Ed's unwavering love and (insert minutiae) Rachel's pride in her 'surrogate daughter'. Eventually Dale succumbs to age/terminal medical condition and asks Ed to promise to look after Tristan and their son, because he knows Ed will love them with no reservations and he doesn't want to leave Tristan alone. Dale leaves everything to Tristan but her she doesn't care about the money because her biggest fear is losing him and then being alone. Grace and Ed promise Dale to look after his family, and then Dale introduces his son to his real father and half-brother before he passes away. Tristan and Son become part of Ed/Grace/Rachel's even more extended family. The other ladies continue to be part of their lives. One of them might be lost in a surprisingly tragic manner to serve as an emotional apex for the story if it happened in a way that Ed was involved but could not save her. Insert more minutiae as required, lol.
Man, look at the time! Am I still rambling?In any case, whether it involves these characters or not, I look forward to your next story.
Can I have a real life Ed?
This is so hot. Do men like Ed exist in real life?
I need one badly
Movie ?
Try writing a few screen plays...
244 Jake
Lovely story
This has a little bit of Forest Gump in it. Everything/evryone he touches turns out well. Good writing.
please keep this going! I'm in my mid 60's and I hope it continues into my 70's! love all the interactons.
More, more!
Great story
I really like the story and writing, and would like to read more.
Well done!
I admire the skill taken here. Each character has a fully developed story and motivation. The plot and genuine warmth keeps you entertained, not just the physicality. Well done!
Please, More!!!!
Please, more! more
Moar
The beauty of this series is how amazing you have written the individuality of each character and how they interact. How Ed loves each for their own reasons, and the fact that tou have left future story elements for sequels excites me, i NEED more of these. Please, i can only re-read these so many times.
Amazing!!!
Thanks so much BurntRedstone this is a great series. Can't wait for more!
Great
i love that this story is good enough it didn't need the sex scenes to be good, very well written,
Great Read
I have enjoyed both of the stories about Ed and the ladies. I believe you have a real talent and will enjoy any future additions to this tale. I will also be reading the rest of your stories as well based upon the entertainment provided in these two. Thanks.
Repetetive and boring
Interchangeable, shallow, needy women, 2-dimensional bad guys (most other men), and a "hero" who stumbles through life cock-first. Yawn.
Another wonderful story!
This story is amazing and so well written! That you've taken the time to keep everyone and more in the story is brilliant! Then there's the love, your story made me cry in a few endearing parts... It's so well done, I only hope that's there's more to this very compelling and addictive story!
Thank you so much for sharing it with us!
A good sequel, but Ed's drinking habits made him look like third stage alcoholic. My uncle was like that. He drunk only a little and only in a good spirits - until he was silly drunk at the end. Like Ed. Died when he was 45, also drinking. So in a way this story isn't so good. Especially for younger people, who could find your mentioned scotch fascinating to their deaths.
BurntRedstone, I like the cut of your jib. This is really great writing and I can't wait to read part 3.
Really good
I really enjoyed this story line and hope you consider more installments with these characters. Ed is such a likeable person you really bring him and all the women alive.
Very riveting story
I have read both installments in this series and love them both. In the next installment you should deal with Shirley's outcome. Again, very nice.
Damn It . . .
you did it again!!! You left me nothing worth complaining about. How can I be a nasty, egotistical, self-serving, negative critic :-(
Yeah, I LOVED it. Thank you so much for your time and talent. Lyn
damn
Another lovely story......but you could have narrated what happened about Tristan and her baby........do they tell Ed or does Rachel reveal the secret
Anyway........ That was a fantastic story..... Thanks for sharing.*****x5
Plenty of plots to take this farther
I really hope there is more of Ed and his girls to come. Really enjoyed these two stories about him.
UMPHF!
Damn! That was good!
SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL
Sorry for being demanding but SEQUEL!
This has become one of my favourite stories on here and if possible a sequel that ties up or give closure to us will be greatly appreciated.
Seriously Ed x Isabelle needs more screen time. If memory serves me correctly, she has only been in 2 sex scenes so far.
(and all good things come in 3) ;3
Fantastic
This is without doubt the best story I have ever read. I do hope you will continue with this storyline, there is so much to happen in this estate.
Thank you so much for a real story to tug the heartstrings.
More.
Yes more please.
Excellent.
5*.
Love this story and the characters in it.
More please.
very good
Nice story of polyamory that works for Ed and the women. I haven't read any of your other stories, but I'll have to check them out. Thank you.
Love these characters...
Realised there was a part two to the first story and read it today. Love love love these characters. My favourites are Ed and Rachel...but I still live the others also. Please write more about them. Great writing and great characters.... Want more...lol
awesome
Looking forward to continuation of Eds story
Good story
but it was almost too much of a good thing.
Definitely over the top.
Some of Ed's behaviour was that of one mildly on the autistic spectrum.
But there can be no disputing this was very entertaining.
So many dangling story threads
With the Jack, the Shepherds and Ed you have your work cut out keeping us entertained: if there are no sequels soon on any or all these stories we will hunt ypu down and chain you to your word processor until you cough up more...
MORE PLEASE!!
Why are these not a book?! Please, PLEASE keep writing! I just read your stories for 8 hours straight!!!
SO AWESOME
I love it , i wonder if they will all move into the same house or go on a trip all of them or mannnn i dunno so awesome.
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