The Most Valuable Gift

Heart-felt and sexy as hell; GREAT STORIES!!

Great story but some thoughts / more Grace

First off, I loved the original story, even if it did make us wait til the last few pages to finally get Grace involved romantically (which was what the title was named after in the first place). That said it ended nicely and I enjoyed it thoroughly - on the sequel I fully expected to find lots more action with Ed and Grace now that they finally accepted each other's love, with Rachel basically being his other "wife" and the other girls being part of the harem but not having them all be in love with each other.

The round robin got predictable and to some extent boring because of how things turned out perfectly for each thing. Case in point, Ed's with Zoe and it "just" so happens that is the time he's gruff and grumpy/aggressive when he's with the person that loves it the most. Basically the round robin template didn't agree with me but that's me. We'd see the chapter talk about someone on the phone needing Ed's help and it's like "ah, guess it's her turn now" etc.

In the end I'm alright even with that, but the thing I was disappointed the most (aside from the fact there's not a 3rd chapter out yet :P ) was not enough Grace!! It felt like she was barely in the story compared to the others, her screentime got pushed aside conveniently due to classes and her pregnancy at the end almost seemed like a way to make up for it. Happy with her pregnancy and would love to see more story, just wish she had been included in the story much, much more. We had a ton of pages devoted to the Barbados trip which was nice but I kept waiting for him to return home to Grace. I love all the girls but I suppose the reason I react this way is 1) the title/synopsis of the original story being about Grace and her being the main love interest yet getting the least amount of pages. It's almost like you as the author didn't agree with the story you had originally put out and tried to push her to the side for a majority of the pages, and a lot of the pages she was in was not as detailed. Could just be me though.

Looking at this long rant it looks like I hated the story but I honestly enjoyed it, just thinking it could've been more is all. You have a very good writing style and I love your stories overall. For the original story I'd give you a 5, for this one however I'd say 3.5 at best unfortunately. There were lots of good points in the story but too many things taking away from it too, but that said I'm still hoping for a chapter 3!

Add another chapter love both stories.

going places

i would love to see more of this story.you left a lot of stories unanswered. for ed i would like to see how for he progresses in his job. for grace i would like to see if she has twins/triplets and what they turn out to be. will grace end up marrying ed? considering her stance on marriage. will zoe get sophia to come home and prosper.
will victoria get her girls back?

Please add another chapter

Ed is probably the best character I've run across on this site and there is still so much potential left for Ed and company.

PSA

Red has confirmed on his bio that he IS working/planning another chapter of Ed. So we aren't left with a a good but more story opening story(this is Not a chapter, its a Novel!) Red keeps updating his bio page with info everynow and then so check it to keep up!

-SnowRevol

more please

I would really like to see more of this story it was a great read.

Outstanding

I have read both story's and by far the best I have read on Literotica looking forward to more of this story in the mean time i will go and read more story's from this outstanding story teller

Thanks for posting :)

Loving Ed

lovely

DAMMM GOOD.one he'll of a lucky guy

Great love story.

Best read coupled with "ONE WHO UNDERSTANDS". I want more of this.

So Glad

I am so very glad you have continued their story! I just hope you can spark your imagination for just one more story, I mean, you can't leave us hanging!! We just have to hear about the babies!! I absolutely love your work. You have an amazing imagination and a way of giving us characters that we just have to fall in love with. Thank you, thank you for some wonderful stories! Please keep writing!!