You are good writer…enjoy reading your stories. One observation - your enthusiasm for alliteration and metaphor is close to being over the top and somewhat of a distraction from the tale. I found myself paying more attention to your style than to the story! Some of it can actually be amusing! "Incidental incident," "Visceral vibrato," and a host of others makes it seem that you are trying to splatter the story with just too much flowery and unnecessary wordage. In a way, your style harkens back to the Victorian style of erotica as illustrated in "Fanny Hill" and "A Man and His Maid." A bad thing? I suppose not. Perhaps it's all in what readers like and prefer. I'm off now…I've got to pull out my Webster's unabridged. Where in the heck did you ever come up with "pulchritude" and "consanguine"?!! LOL! ****
THAT is what makes oediplex's stories so fun to read. Always amusing and engaging. And hey, even if I don't like the story, it ends up enhancing my vocabulary.
Really loved your prose The "style" did it for me and provided a rare treat among these usually hum-drum stories. Keep it up, for your readers as well as your mom.
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You are good writer…enjoy reading your stories. One observation - your enthusiasm for alliteration and metaphor is close to being over the top and somewhat of a distraction from the tale. I found myself paying more attention to your style than to the story! Some of it can actually be amusing! "Incidental incident," "Visceral vibrato," and a host of others makes it seem that you are trying to splatter the story with just too much flowery and unnecessary wordage. In a way, your style harkens back to the Victorian style of erotica as illustrated in "Fanny Hill" and "A Man and His Maid." A bad thing? I suppose not. Perhaps it's all in what readers like and prefer. I'm off now…I've got to pull out my Webster's unabridged. Where in the heck did you ever come up with "pulchritude" and "consanguine"?!! LOL! ****
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THAT is what makes oediplex's stories so fun to read. Always amusing and engaging. And hey, even if I don't like the story, it ends up enhancing my vocabulary.
Very good.
Nice, I like it. Yes, I skimmed after a bit but that's what happens when I get excited, I skim. Very good, thanks.
Wow!
Really loved your prose The "style" did it for me and provided a rare treat among these usually hum-drum stories. Keep it up, for your readers as well as your mom.
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