by CuriousChicago
Quick and dirty. Too often a sign of laziness or impatience, but here it works well.
Great action but the story was far too short, leaving me to find another story to complete the business at hand.
Leave writing to writers, please. We would greatly appreciate it.
The writing is NOT bad, as least as far a grammar is concerned. (I skimmed it rather than read it. I downloaded it to read it at a later time.)
However, there really isn't any story. It starts and, Bing bang boom, they're fucking. No real sense of why, no sense of how.
Started ok. Need more detail and it could have gone much longer. What happened next, did they do anything else?
There was obviously not much effort put into this story whatsoever. Zero stars. I'll not read this author again.
I thought this story was what most heterosexual boys would dream about, learning to pleasure an older woman like this. If I were still in my youth, I would have gladly completed this task with some of the older neighbor women in my neighborhood. Great story!