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it's been done before ...
but eastern Euro thing threw me off. Kudos. So did he actually have to pay the five thousand, lol ? It seems so. Don't know what he does , but business must be good. Much like this flash story which was old wine in new bottle. I thank the author. Next year , thespian wife has to role play slutty Kardashian.
Nice
Like LSD said, this has been done before. However, each time a husband and wife enjoy each other in any way possible is a good thing. It allows love to nurture between a happily married couple.
Damn I'm getting sentimental. I need a good BTB tale to straighten me out. lol
Five Stars
Some details...
Some details. 1st - His wife name was really Margot and not Anita...unless this was another Jay and another wife with an Eastern European accent...2nd - This loving wife story should have been sent to LW before the one sent yesterday...This is a good story, but while reading it we can't forget the bad one from yesterday...But because of yesterday's story being bad I'll rate this one 4*, because the writer redeemed himself, even if he tryed to make these two different people...But the accent betrayed him...
Major tense problems
Switched back and forth between present and past four times in the first paragraph. The dialog is rarely attributed so have the time it's unclear who is speaking. Then sucking a cock after it's been in an ass is a recipe for disease. No way in hell this story is better than a 3.
An old story line
You had to know it was his wife!
Nicely done
I knew what was going on pretty quickly but the eagerness of the characters was refreshing and fun.
The wife is the prostitute
Unfortunately this has been done before, multiple times. Your addition really added nothing. The dialogue wasn't particularly witty or clever and the sex was mundane.
Sure it's been used before...
and I figured out at the bar that this would be his wife, maybe in a wig. The Eastern European accent was a nice touch. I imagined her dialogue exactly in the accent.
"He loved hearing her talk about the other clients she fucked."
"Fuck my slutty ass like all those other guys before you!"
The banter back and forth heightened the erotic nature of the role play.
5 *'s
A little too obvious
You would have been better suited putting this in another category, such as Erotic Couplings. This is not one of those "LW is for cheating wives only" complaints. My problem is that by putting it in LW, that was a dead giveaway that they were role playing. From the first paragraph I suspected she was his wife, so much so that it would have been a unique twist and surprise if it turned out she wasn't. The twist wasn't a twist.
A nice effort, even if its beed done before, and better.
Thanks for the effort.
Good Story****
Very enjoyable thanks for sharing.
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