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wouldn't say I "like" it, but it is a good poem
the subject matter makes me cringe much like my smack poetry. However it is incredibly written, and gets me in your mind immediately. Well done. love the line "the white and soft" truly poetic.
I thought the phrasing
worked well, and you presented the idea well. Something didn't grab me here, I understand the meaning and agree, but it felt like a cascade of differing metaphors, each not
really supporting the other. While the overall meaning is undeniable, the poem felt somehow disjointed.
jim :)
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The 'as if' pattern at first eluded me, than I caught it and the rest finally made some sense.
cowardly justice
Vengence disguised in the sheep's clothing of justice. Sound familiar?
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