Three Square Meals Ch. 09

Now the guns are out its even better, hope the next chapter is coming soon.

A very good tale!

All of the chapters so far have been well thought out, presented, and delivered. Keep up the good work.

Keeping up with the quality

So now you've dropped two hints no?
1. Alyssa past = either sister / childhood friend
2. Alyssa feeling something grow = I knew she did not have the time to go on birth control!

As far as I concern we should expect two more developments
1. Finding more on John's history = is he a royal prince???
2. When do we get a sexy green alien lady into the mix?

Your first two guesses are answered in Chapter 10 which is nearly complete.

As for the other two... You will have to wait and see! :)

Keeping up the excellence, I see

I see that you are a new author, and it's obvious you're not writing this story just for the sake of sex scenes. It's obvious you're a fan of sci-fi and space battles, and of futuristic technologies, and it's damn awesome that it is so.

However, I'm noticing that you tend to jump from sex scene into a space combat scene abruptly, then shift it back into sex rather quickly. It's not bad, per se, but the abruptness may cause a bit of a hitch to the flow of the story - just a cautionary notice. So, let me put an idea through to you: How about you dedicate one whole chapter or chapters to non-erotic part of this whole adventure, and make it into an extended suspense/action/thriller scene, with an air of seriousness, gunfights, hoverbike chases, and dangerous spaceship battles? Maybe even something wrapped up in spy stuff mystery? I mean there is a war brewing on the horizon, isn't there? So, when that extended chapter is done, the main characters get to celebrate their victory with awesome sex? You did something like that before in this chapter, as well as when they saved Calara, yes, but it was short. I'm talking something more dedicated and lengthy - something that would be much more rewarding overall. I mean, just think about it.

Anyway, when it comes to the sex scenes, I'll just say that you're doing awesome. It's nicely written, it isn't forced, a chemistry can be felt, emotions and love are present, and kinkiness is very welcome to spice it up. If you do feel like increasing the level of kinkiness even more, that's okay, since you're obviously taking effort to make it more than just sex. That much is from me.

Good advice, thank you for the feedback. I'll think about that for future chapters. I have submitted chapter 10 and it's awaiting approval. Coincidentally it follows some of your advice, so let me know if you find that format works a bit better.

I just realized...

So, is this incest in disguise? If he's modifying them to share his own genetic material, he's basically turning them into his daughters-by-injection. And he is old enough to be their Daddy.

Is Daddy-Daughters one of the kinks, here? Incest is the most popular category on Literotica.

So many missing aspects...

It's a bit like those idiots that thought it was a good idea to blow up that beached whale carcass...

When a spacecraft is "destroyed", unless antimatter is the manner of destruction, the navigation hazards that remain must be attended to. Salvage of the power system is important, and maybe picking up the loot from previous piratical acts might be somewhat profitable. But no, they hypered on their way without a backward glance.

And no ship's computer at all?! The Invictus is just a dumb transport?

You might want to find a good editor to help you flesh out your line drawings.

Re: Missing aspects

This isn't a science story, it's science-fantasy, because that makes for much more interesting and exciting fight scenes.

"the navigation hazards that remain must be attended to."

I've never seen a scene in Star-wars where they stop and clear away the ruins of a tie fighter, or in Star-Trek where they stop to clear up a wrecked Klingon Warbird. Such scenes would be boring, tedious filler, and a waste of the readers time.

"And no ship's computer at all"

The ship is mostly automated, but they need crew for functions such as flying and shooting, just like the Millennium Falcon or the Enterprise.

Tefler

Awesome

This is my 5th time reading this story. It's the best story on this site "in my opinion" please keep it going Tefler.