The writer of this story must of been realy bored writing this story because 2 pages the gentlemans name is Jordan, come the 3rd page and the guys name is Brandon. Or am I just reading wrong. And at on stage in page 3 Jill becomes Lucy. Imagine if you as the writer is bored writing the story now imagine how we the readers feel????
It's hard to believe you (the author) had so little interest in the story that you couldn't take the time to proofread it. The other commenter talked about the name changes and you actually mixed them up in one paragraph (Jorddan then Brandon, then Jordan again). The story was worth a 4* to me, but it was worth about 1* for caring for your audience. Shape up!
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Bored
The writer of this story must of been realy bored writing this story because 2 pages the gentlemans name is Jordan, come the 3rd page and the guys name is Brandon. Or am I just reading wrong. And at on stage in page 3 Jill becomes Lucy. Imagine if you as the writer is bored writing the story now imagine how we the readers feel????
Good Story, But....
It's hard to believe you (the author) had so little interest in the story that you couldn't take the time to proofread it. The other commenter talked about the name changes and you actually mixed them up in one paragraph (Jorddan then Brandon, then Jordan again). The story was worth a 4* to me, but it was worth about 1* for caring for your audience. Shape up!
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