Zenith's Humiliation

Ugh....

Why do people like you post bullshit like this??

Boring. Idiotic. A waste of time. I stopped reading about a third through this pile of garbage.

Nothing erotic about this at all.

CRAP

Someone needs to beat you .

Could use some work

You've got an interesting idea going on, but a lot of it is showing and background character building that muddles the erotica.
This could easily be a multiparty story, starting with why happens infront of the family, then another short about what happens with the cousin and go into more details.
Sights, sounds, smells, and feelings would make it much more enthralling.

Keep up the writting though! And, don't pay much head to the negative, ananyomous comments who just say it's crap without saying why. Good luck!

Nothing

But Crap! first two lines were enough for me.

Crap does not ever resemble BDSM

Check the stalwart of BDSM, RACK -- Risk-aware consensual kink (RACK, also risk-accepted consensual kink) What you wrote belongs in a different category.

Good start

A very good start of a story i definitely would like to read more like maybe the rest of the family getting into it maybe the cousins take her back out side nude and make her stay that way as she does more for the others in the family!