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Still charming
I feel you have definitely added some dimension to your last effort, which was a fine first story. This one has a nice flow and you have developed the characters more. I still admire your skill at riding the line between getting too clinical and properly using the erotic force which stories on this site aspire to achieve.
Nice tale
You have a voice that's developing nicely. 5 stars from me. You don't need one but I'd be more than happy to edit for you.
VERY GOOD!
Especially for your second effort. This is the first story I've read in this category, usually I read and write Loving Wives and Taboo stories. I think you have won another reader to The Romance Category. Once again, You have a fine story and I wish you luck.
Thank you!
Yes, Wow! Thank you all for your kind comments. It's a pity I can't get the editors of Women's magazines to accept my stories! They're not as racy as these two stories, of course, but I can nearly paper the room with rejection slips! I have a couple more almost ready. Hope you like them, too.
WOW!
This is sooo good! Keep writing China-Miss! Thank You!
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