All Comments on 'JJ and Ashley Ch. 04'

Fantastic!! I have been waiting for this. Please tell me there is more. I loved it

I loved it!! More, please write some more very quickly

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it was great. as always. excited for more. love the tension build up. im curious to know if JJ will take Ashelys virginity? but anyways hurry with more great story for us!

A really good chapter.

I love the slow build-up. The way you make them real by conflicting emotions. The description of Ashley's mixed feelings. The hesitation of whether to push this further and ruin a good friendship.

And the erotic scenes were just lovely, the hot kissing and the sex at Ashley's house.

I adore the series, you're doing an incredible job.

Thank you Thank you Thank you!

Can't wait for more. Thanks.

You are doing GREAT !!! KEEP up the Great work. I wait impatiently for EVERY word you write. This is a Wonderful story!

Can't wait for more... I hope you don't make us wait long! Good read.

I have been reading Literotica stories for more than 5 years; most of them have been lesbian themed. This storyline is, hands down, the best I've ever read. The way you've developed the characters and their personalities gives me hope that you intend to turn this into a full-length novel. You have talent and have skillfully worked that talent into a world in which I would gladly lose myself. I only wonder why you haven't written this as a manuscript and submitted it to be published.

Geez....they are both so damn adorable together!!!

Love it, can't wait to see what happens next.

XXX

Need more!

This is the one story line to check for almost daily. Keep it coming, JJ and Ashley are awesome!

I don't visit Literotica regularly but since I read the preceding chapters of "JJ and Ashley," I've been checking the site everyday in hopes of finding an update. This story is so great. The characters have been expertly crafted and their stories are so rich. It's been a tremendous gift to read.

Thanks and please update soon. I'll be checking for it daily.

I like the realism. Two people who have an attraction that has built over time, who have faults, whose relationship isn't just one note.

None of this 'they saw each other across the room, fell instantly in love, fucked like bunnies and lived happily ever after' nonsense.

Good story well written. I look forward to more.

I am soooooo pleased to see JJ happy and having fun! She deserve happiness in her life and Ashley is her sunshine. :)

This is such a wonderful story I too check every day for a new chapter. Don't make us wait to long please.

Keep it going, DF, you're doing a great job so far. I think this one could run and run.

So well written, and so worth the wait! Thank you so much for your wonderful and loving story!

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I second romancelives. I love how for once even when got it to the sex it was beautiful and slow. So worth the wait.

I'm so glad that both Ashley and JJ are finally happy and I think that love really should continue!!! :-)

I think J.J. has a better understanding of who she is and where she came from, maybe closure on her father's abuse and what made him the not-so-lovable monster she remembers. Neither she nor Ashley can ignore the love between them (although neither would call it that at this point). I think it has to go one of two ways, either they both leave town together, or J.J. decides to stay.

IT IS JJ AND ASHLEY not "the older woman," "The Blonde," "The smaller Girl." You dehumanize them and the reader loses the identity you have been trying to create. Use only their names, and keep the reader a part of the story. It is a mistake some writers make, and leaves a "cold" disinterested feeling, especially in a story

this long. Too bad. When you finally put JJ and ashley together, you broke the bond with the reader by dehumanizing them by not using the names you gave them. I stopped reading.

As one of "the readers" I must say I was not in ANY way disengaged by their descriptions. Using "JJ" & "Ashley" in every sentence is disengaging in my opinion bc its too repetitive & amateurish AKA boring as hell. But thats just my $.02. So dont speak for all of us.

& Im sorry you stopped reading. You missed out :)

Mmmm this was a really good one. I love these two characters. Next stop....chapter five.

Hallo DarkFang!

I'm pretty sure everyone that has read this story, recognizes some part of them self, a friend, or sees JJ and Ashley, in someone else they know... I can tell you Jackie and I certainly do!

Thank-you so much for sharing your beautiful stories with all of your fans and readers... 5-Stars and 5-Wet Orgasms!

Your kinky dyke friend,

Gay Kat.

Great story with so much details .... Great

Soooo beautiful. Makes your heart sing, thank you very much.