“must have lied there for about two hours” “ Surely you meant to say “lain there...” if you had “lied” you we not telling the truth! “ I even lied on the lounger” and “I might be seen that lied on my back”, “We lied in the sun” I'm sure that the use of 'lay' would have been better. A lovely story of memories of Greek beaches.
Hi,a great story and keep going nude now you have started.I work in an office besides a nudist resort and we now work naked too.me and my hubby use the resort lots but we like to travel and we love the Greek islands.
Good start as a story, please consider to continue it.
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Anonymous05/12/16
A Decent Effort at Being Indecent
A pretty imaginative and not to bad first-person account at risk taking! It is a rather quick read and I found myself wondering about sunburn somewhere in the middle, but overall I think it hits more marks than it misses! Nice effort! Please do tell more about any other adventures HAD or PLANNED for the future!
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Anonymous05/12/16
Sexy
Loved the story! Hope you write about more adventures and continue your exposure!
First, thanks for showing good fundamental writing skills which includes the obvious effort and thought you put into the story construction. I agree with others that this is a good start, a bit short and leaves something to the imagination. The story line has good elements and characters that are starting to exhibit some dimension. I think the idea of a couple mutually experiencing and discovering excursions outside a comfort zone is full of potential. Keep the interactions between characters lively, e.g. with more conversation, and refrain from too much simple narration of a story line and your readers will be plentiful. (Also, think about the tags a bit more since they help people locate a story with a search.)
Hey Tom. We are not all pros. If the idea comes across then let it go at that. Laid, lain, lay... who cares. I enjoyed the story. I was also not bothered by it being short. Many of the longer stories get boring. Sorry if I made any typo or wrong word mistakes in this.....
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“must have lied there for about two hours” “ Surely you meant to say “lain there...” if you had “lied” you we not telling the truth! “ I even lied on the lounger” and “I might be seen that lied on my back”, “We lied in the sun” I'm sure that the use of 'lay' would have been better. A lovely story of memories of Greek beaches.
Nude beaches
Hi,a great story and keep going nude now you have started.I work in an office besides a nudist resort and we now work naked too.me and my hubby use the resort lots but we like to travel and we love the Greek islands.
Nice story
Good start as a story, please consider to continue it.
A Decent Effort at Being Indecent
A pretty imaginative and not to bad first-person account at risk taking! It is a rather quick read and I found myself wondering about sunburn somewhere in the middle, but overall I think it hits more marks than it misses! Nice effort! Please do tell more about any other adventures HAD or PLANNED for the future!
Sexy
Loved the story! Hope you write about more adventures and continue your exposure!
Loved it.
I LOVED your story. No gross sex with strangers. Just exciting images. Please write more.
want more
more of your stories would be great....
So Stimulating..
What a brilliiant story, it hits just the right balance of description of your journey to exhibitionism... love to hear more adventures please!
Agree - Good start, write more
First, thanks for showing good fundamental writing skills which includes the obvious effort and thought you put into the story construction. I agree with others that this is a good start, a bit short and leaves something to the imagination. The story line has good elements and characters that are starting to exhibit some dimension. I think the idea of a couple mutually experiencing and discovering excursions outside a comfort zone is full of potential. Keep the interactions between characters lively, e.g. with more conversation, and refrain from too much simple narration of a story line and your readers will be plentiful. (Also, think about the tags a bit more since they help people locate a story with a search.)
give us a break on grammer corrections
Hey Tom. We are not all pros. If the idea comes across then let it go at that. Laid, lain, lay... who cares. I enjoyed the story. I was also not bothered by it being short. Many of the longer stories get boring. Sorry if I made any typo or wrong word mistakes in this.....
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