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by Anonymous01/18/16

Editing problems

Toward the end of the first page you switch from third to first person and part of a previous page is repeated on page 2. Be careful with your editing, ask someone to proofread your stories.

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by Grouchojim01/18/16

Thank you

I'll try to do better. The first installment of Sensualist was first person, and I began the second segment the same way, then around the 4th chapter I changed my mind and went back to chapter 1 and thought I had made the appropriate changes to 3rd person. Apparently I didn't and my proof reader missed some as well. Again, I'm sorry for the inconvenience, and hope you'll continue reading the story.
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