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by trigudis01/20/16

Abbreviations...

Your story is a tender one, but you need to abbreviate correctly. Ex: you are isn't your but you're. Also, you switch from third person (you) to first (I) in the last paragraph. Nothing wrong with that, I suppose, as long as it doesn't confuse the reader. Did you do that for affect?

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by Anonymous01/21/16

Boring, more like an essay.

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by Sampkyang01/27/16

Very Nice 5*s

Excellent writing now weave a story around this sensuous excitement...

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