Eros' Errant Arrows

Painful

I really tried to read your story but I just couldn't. Thank you for your time and effort but that's about all I'm able to appreciate about this story. **

Hilarious but hard to read.

LOL. Cupid is a bad card player and everyone is a lousy shot. :D

Hilarious!

But I do agree: it was hard to read and I had to muddle through it as the dialogue made it hard to pinpoint who was talking at any given moment. Not to mention that the relationships were not at all clear from the viewpoint of Ross. I kept wracking my brain trying to figure out who was who and how they were related as I read this.

Overall though, not bad. Just refine your writing a bit and you'll be an awesome writer here!

an original and creative effort, but

too bad Cupid's arrow didn't hit his mom and an arrow of hers hit him. That would be the perfect combination. As the saying goes, "a boy's penis and his mother's vagina are made for each other."

good

It was funny and good but the ending was a lil rushed.

cute premise

hard to follow

i thought this was robin hood with the arrows and robin and marian.