You should pay attention to the verb tense. Stories are almost always best when told in past tense. Changing at random from past to present tense is distracting and is poor construction.
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You should pay attention to the verb tense. Stories are almost always best when told in past tense. Changing at random from past to present tense is distracting and is poor construction.
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