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Innocent Sins Ch. 10

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/22/10

I really liked the story. Yeah Heather fucked up and Jake made me pay but in the end they made it through all the hurt and anger. And hopefully they are in a better, stronger place this time around.

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by iowNotIou10/29/10

great writing

you had me crying and smiling alternately. I thought it odd that Jake never questioned his wife about Ty before going to dinner with him at the start of the story. If he'd known Ty was a stripper, he'd not have sent his wife to help him decorate.
But then the story would have been different. Ah well.

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by norcal6212/02/10

Another comment.

You say this is your favorite writing series. I found the story erotic and a good read, but as I said before, the inconsistencies in the character's thoughts or statements, and their actions was too much to enjoy.
You say you're not racist but the story is replete with racist comments and allusions. That also offended me a lot during the reading. There must be ways you can use your fear of racial competition without the repeated use of "black man" instead of the person's name.

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by Anonymous01/07/11

contrived

decent writing can't cover up lack of imagination

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by Anonymous05/10/11

Sorry, just one star.

Perhaps descent writing..but bottom line is that she cuckolded Jake and was a slut. Jake got some balls but, at the end, author, you cut them off. For shame on you.

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by Anonymous08/15/11

define love?

I am sad for those who find it incredible that the two got back together and I think the reason for their doubts reside in the corruption of the words "I love you." To truly love someone means that you always will love them for the remainder of your life. If both truly love the other, then at some point in the future they will be back together.

The same can be said of the corruption of the word forgiveness. You have not truly forgiven if you do not forget and keep dragging the sins of the past to the forefront.

A great story and one that will always appeal to those who know the true meanings of the words "Love" and "Forgive"

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by MissouriUSA09/16/11

I hope to see new stories by chezshirecat at some point.

The ending here was a little contrived in order to get Jake and Heather back together. But I do not think that a reconciliation would have been completely out of the question. By the time it was all over, there was plenty enough pain to go around. Building up from the ashes makes for a good story once in awhile. One would hope that Jake and Heather do get a happy ending.

The lingering question that just never was fully discussed was the hold that Ty had over Heather. Even after this last reconciliation, I didn't really see anything in the story that convinced me that Ty couldn't show up again sometime in the future and sweep Heather off of her feet yet again. He used drugs at first. Then he threatened to tell Jake. But then he just showed up and Heather seemed to fall to the floor and spread her legs. It would be awfully difficult to reconcile with a woman who apparantly was so vulnerable to another man's advances.

It was a good series though and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing the story.

MissouriUSA

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by tazz31712/07/11

SINS ARE NEVER INNOCENT

thoughts and actions are supposed to be, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by tazz31712/07/11

#2 FOR THE GRINNER

BY NOT ALLOWING PUBLIC COMMENTS YOU HAVE FORCED THE READERS TO WAIT AND MAKE A RATING CHOICE. AS WITH ALL MULTIPLE CHAPTER STORIES, SOME WILL BE BETTER THAN OTHERS, BUT THE OVERALL THEME SHOULD BE REVEALED BY THE END HOPEFULLY WITH SOME TYPE OF CLOSURE. GOOD JOB TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Huedogg202/03/12

a 10 chapter cuckold manual

10 chapters on how to give a cheating slut your balls.

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by Anonymous04/10/12

Crap

No matter what she is a cheat and a woman with a BBC fetish.Ty was not criminalised even after administering drugs to his partner wife that's too bad.Castrate that bastard I might give you a 3.

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by Anonymous08/14/12

Thanks

Thanks for the read. rough ride for them, but I truly believe in forgiveness. That said, Ty should not be forgiven. he should have been punished more severly. Loss of man-hood might not have been enough.

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by sgt54808/18/12

Good Writing, But.........

I gave this a five because it was well written (grammer, etc). But Jake is a dope and Heather is a pig.

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by Anonymous01/12/13

Who betrays once

it will continue to do. She is a selfish slut and he is idiot.

1*

Stupid and pretentious story!

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by orblover01/31/13

Well Done

A very well crafted story that was an emotional roller coaster of human emotions, from both sides.

Many thanks,
Orb

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by doddauto02/03/13

outstanding!!!

I just about gave up on this story but now I'm glad I stayed till the end.

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by Anonymous02/14/13

aitch'em says;

Hohum! A whimp story.

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by studebakerhawk05/12/13

She still doesn't get it. Probably never will.

She is apparently incapable of taking responsibility for her own actions. "Heather felt more alive than she had since Ty had re-entered her life and messed up her happiness with Jake." Ty messed up her happiness, she was just another victim. How does she deal with Jake when he moves back to town? "She'd taken herself off the pill when Jake had moved back to town, hoping they'd end up in bed together. It probably wasn't the most honest thing she'd ever done." Yeah, nothing says 'trustworthy' to a guy like manipulation and deceit, especially from someone who has already proven themselves adept at lies and betrayal. Thank you for sharing your stories with us, but I just couldn't buy the reconciliation art the end.

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by Anonymous08/02/13

Bippity Boppity Boop!

And the Fairy Godmother makes all of old hurts and angry feelings go away. Good thing this is fiction because it's totally unbelievable in most settings. BAH!

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by Huedogg208/09/13

why get a divorce, if in the end your going to take the whore back

while chezshirecat is a great writer and it sucks that he stopped writing. Why take the whore back?

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by Anonymous09/22/13

The BEST STORY

The best story I ever red. Amazing... THANK YOU!!!!! Please come back and post again...

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by dylan95410/02/13

excellent

Really enjoyed the story but now feel guilty because in rushing through I forgot to vote until the last chapter!! Sorry but they all deserved a 4* or 5* in my opinion!

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by EXursusRhere04/20/15

My second time reading this one.

Chezshirecat, a second reading just confirms my thoughts of the first time through...You do write a damned fine story. Hated Jake for a while, but he manned up very nicely. Ty will forever be a contemptible piece of shit. Heather earned Jake's forgiveness as he earned hers. All in all, a fine piece of work, thank you.

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by Anonymous04/22/15

Jake is a fool.

Jake is a fool! He could never trust that cheating slut again. Dump her!

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by Nexttimeround02/01/16

confirmed

everything I hate about BMWF; but glad anyway at the apparent reconciliation between the WMWF

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by Anonymous02/28/16

Sure, fine, why not. What have they got to lose?

It's not like either one of them will ever be fit for any other relationship. A nice effort, but not very convincing. You just demonstrated that two fucked up people can ruin each other lives, then reconnect and continue to live together. There was no explaining the adultery, no explaining Jake's reaction, and no explaining the reconnection, other than that was the story you wanted to tell. You just didn't make it believable. But again, thanks for trying.

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by Anonymous04/02/16

1*

cuck shit.

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by Anonymous04/28/16

Wimp husband

What a conniving bitch to purposely get pregnant in order to trap her ex-husband into marrying her again. He treated her better then she deserved in Vegas. I have nothing but contempt for the cheating bitch, and very little respect for the husband. Who knew that a Marine could be such a pussy.

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by Anonymous12/31/16

Never

No man with any kind of pride and self esteem takes this cheating cunt back..... 3*** for the effort, -2***** for the RAAC garbage ending too stupid to believe......

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by Anonymous06/09/17

Ridiculous

She loved him so much but couldn't keep herself from having sex with Ty. Whatever. No man with self confidence would take her back. Maybe if it was just one time due to being drugged, but not because she couldn't stop herself. She has a brain and decided to do the worst thing you can do to a spouse.

Obviously she has problems since she couldn't stop herself with Ty and barely stopped herself with Kurt, but only because Jake was in the room. All it will take is another man getting close and she doesn't care about anything but herself.

Speaking of which she seems to be supremely selfish throughout... Sex with Ty, lying to Jake, unprotected sex, trapping Jake at the end by stopping her pill.

Just ridiculous.

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by ejsathome07/26/17

Touched me . . .

. . . as much after my second read as it did after my first. It was quite a life journey for both of them. And I do love happy endings. Thanks very much again.

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by Anonymous08/15/17

Loved the ending

Good story, loved the ending.

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by Anonymous08/29/17

Fantastic!

Sure, it's got the obligatory 9 and 11 inch magical cocks that make all women have multiple orgasms. In addition, the main character somehow managed to become filthy rich in only a few months then has time to galavant around Europe while maintaining a buff body....but I guess it is erotic fiction after all. That aside, I loved it!

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by Anonymous11/04/17

Excellent, well written story 5* but with some reservations

Less is more.

I think it was necessary for her to have the affair for the whole week and not pull back, otherwise the being drugged argument would have likely ended the story.

However, her having sex again in the bathroom with Ty was ridiculous after all the hurt he had caused. If she needed to test herself then she had not learnt and did not have true remorse. Once she committed that act I lost all support for her and the incident with the actor was ridiculous. She was tested and failed 85%. He would never have gone back to her seeing how she reacted, letting him finger her, undress her and suck her nipples before she stopped. Wow how Jake must have admired her control, not...

Jake's whole change in character was overdone but otherwise a possibility as he had been utterly betrayed. She was a cheating, treacherous and traitorous slut. She truly was!

She did show reasonable remorse at the end so the ending was fine but I think she needed to explain herself much more. Jake's actions in Las Vegas deflected from that and spoiled the story in many ways as a result.

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by silentsound11/13/17

Their love didn't almost destroy them

Her slimy big cock loving cunt destroyed their marriage.

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