I couldn't get passed the first page. He said, she said, he said, she said, etc, etc, etc. Damn, man, you have to use a little variety- all that, he said-she said gets real boring very quickly and there's no way I could contend with it for 22 pages.
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Anonymous01/26/16
MM writes the best betas, which is why
the closet cuckolds deride him so, way to close to home and way to close for comfort - same shame and denial for the thousands of cuckold stories they read voraciously and then rebuke.
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Anonymous01/26/16
Used Plot
I have already read story with the same plot, wife cheated with husband's brother ,got pregnant, husband thought it was his, then wife left him for his brother. The husband went to prison for 5 yrs after assaulting his brother. Daughter about to be married, problem as to who should walk with her to the altar, yada, yada, yada. Brother killed himself due to extreme guilt. But sad to say, that story is so much better than this. This is so awful.
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Anonymous01/26/16
22 pages too long! Couldn't finish the first page.
Appreciated the theme of the opus , but this was for hard core MM fans only
I've five starred 10 or more stories by Mr. Moreau but this won't be one of them. For short stories , it's possible to admire the quirky, pathetic/ poignant snapshots that are captured. At novella length , however, things get mawkish and redundant. I do agree with forgiveness granted for repentant trespasses but found execution of this worthy idea bloated and unwieldy in this fictional treatment by my standards.
One gift that still shines is how well this author looks at ( cheating ) love from both sides aka the cuck and bull ( the meandering wife as well ). ' The Bridge ' recently written by Richard Gerald was an excellent story but huge questions cc the characters were left due to that author's choice to stay strictly in first person narration.
This story started only dragging after Stacy and Ron became a conventional couple. Their POVs became mundane. I will say in terms of real life , cheaters who pair up after discarding their marriages rarely last as a couple according to surveys.
This was a lot of work. Matt Moreau has my admiration for following his muse. Personally, I think his limitations as a writer were exposed at this extended length. It doesn't matter though what we say. Because one thing this author and his fictional alter - egos have in common is they don't stop chasing their idiosyncratic goals because of popular opinion.
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Anonymous01/26/16
Jesus fucking Christ
I hoped you'd have killed yourself by now, you piece of shit.
Your writing is only getting worse. How the hell can you stand to look at yourself in the mirror?
You write a long story of "one sided love." It is plain to see the hero loves/hates his family for the wrongs they have done him. But the love is stronger and it drives him to help them even when EVERY THING inside of him says to let them suffer. This story took an hour to read, but the Character went through this for years. With that in mind I could see where he mellowed enough to get hurt again. The problem that I have is that his family did not love him back. It was truly one sided. To do the things and say the things they did...? It seemed to be out of a strange mix of guilt, indebtedness, grief, some fondness and a need for balance. In truth I think k he should have stayed away from them for they were all poison. But what you have done here is very accurately portray a scenario of "What ifs" with decisions I would never have made if I was in that situation. Are they realistic? I don't know and I pity any man who is able to tell me that they are from personal experience! You have written a story that will haunt me in a small way. I both want to thank you and flip you off at the same time. So...thanks...I think.
To me, this was an obvious reboot of Quinn and Kimberly Harris, which had one of the more interesting plots that Matt has written. This much deeper dive gave much more insight into the characters' perspectives. It made some of the more ridiculous plot lines more believable (though added a doozy or two). I did get repetitive, though. I think this deeper dive would have been deep enough if it was shorter.
I am also glad to see MM is back. I don't love everything he writes, but he has a style that makes for -usually- an easy read. Next time, though, how about a lot shorter.
Great writing. The story wasn't to my tastes, but it was very well written and very full of complicated, conflicted characters... I really admire what you were able to put together.
That said, it would have been awesome if it had ended with Stacey finding out he was always cheating on her - the signs were definitely there throughout the "you're the only one for me" of those first 14 years, and later. I thought you were headed that way in what was the pre-cursor to the liver stuff, with the trouble peeing and such.
It would also have been great to find out at the end that Jenna was David's daughter after all and Stacey had her assumptions wrong. It would have been devastating to the whole family and put a major spin on the whole story, of being cuckolded, betrayed by sharing a daughter that turns out to be yours after all, and the man who thinks he's had to share his daughter with you turns out to have been an uncle after all. It just would have made a more complicated and tragic ending.
Somebody took a lot of time and effort to write something and offer it for us to read, free of charge. Disagree? Sure. Hate it and explain why? Absolutely? Have criticisms that you feel strongly about? Tell us. But the hatred of the author and vulgarity and wishing him ill? Grow the fuck up.
I appreciate how much effort it took to put 22 pages into this story. When you factor in that typically (well, unless you are one of those that types one sentence paragraphs and includes plenty of line breaks) each page on Lit runs around 3600 words, this is well over the count for novel length fiction.
The rub comes from the fact that, until extremely late in the story, there were absolutely no redeeming characters. None. I know some people like to read stories like that, I mean if you like Faulkner this is probably right up your alley. It leaves the story flat, however, and that is one of the things that killed this story for me despite the aforementioned effort.
The first real character that I could feel anything for was James. Everyone else was despicable on one level or another. The protagonist was a milquetoast loser that was respected by no one. Certainly, they claimed to respect him, but none did. As James said, they all cried Crocodile tears at one point or another. All of them double-crossed him at some point, most repeatedly. They were supposedly not forgiven until the end, but all he ever did was do things for them. His brother was despicable, his first wife the same, his daughter only less so, and his aunt continued to spout from one head that she respected him beyond words, whilst the other head told him to suck it up. By the time he was gang-raped in prison he should have had no issue taking it up every orifice, because that is what he had been taking from everyone. Minor aside, how did he get gang raped when he was in the untouchable 'christian gang'?
I could go on with my disappointments, but as Inigo Montoya once said, "There is no time, allow me to sum up."
How do we, as the audience, balance the obvious effort involved in writing the story versus it's major plot issues and lack of a true villain/hero? I could give 5* for effort, but other than that it was a 1* story for me. In the end, I split the difference and rounded down. 2*
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Anonymous01/26/16
It's like MM decided to combine
ten stories into one since they are all the same anyway. "It's tough having a small dick and a wife that needs a big one." That theme has served MM for years.
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Anonymous01/26/16
typical
queen MM- 0*
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Anonymous01/26/16
total betrayal at all levels and they stay socialable, get real
the ending doesn't speak well for anyone in the story and Stacey from the get go was a round heeled slut. she knew Ron's history and got herself intentionally fucked by him. Great! 1* simply because it doesn't go lower.
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Anonymous01/26/16
1*
Supreme wimp loser VS supreme selfish brainless sneaky assholes.
MM really can write some awfully vile characters - well, they are always his usual stock characters, copy-pasted from one story to the next. And they all treat the poor loser dude like shit. And from start to finish, everyone keeps pushing the message that the poor fuck is in the wrong and that HE HAS TO GET OVER IT! Huh? What the fuck?
But, no worries! Evil will triumph in the end!
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Anonymous01/26/16
Welcome Back!
When I saw your name listed at a time in the morning that I should have stayed in bed, I smiled. It was such a welcome relief to know that I was not going to be reading a superman story, where super reeks vengeance over all who have crossed him. I enjoy your anti heroes doing their best in a world of rejection and coming out of it wearing the high ground.
I also love your toughness in ignoring the low brained detractors that comment. You have balls of steel and elephant thick skin. You are the man!
5 *****
Granted, looking at the comments, I will probably not appreciate your story and at 22 pages, I won't invest that kind of time into a story I won't enjoy, but you certainly have an audience and I am glad you continue to write.
And HOLY COW! Twenty Two pages? No wonder you haven't been around. That is almost novella size!
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Anonymous01/26/16
FUCK OFF
Go back to whatever hole you crawled out under you little bitch, the only people that even enjoy this sort of crap are bitches like your charaters so fuck you and them....just go away
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Anonymous01/26/16
5
for another great story rom MM Great LW story
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Anonymous01/26/16
1*
VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT TRANNY BITCH FOOL VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!
It is smth i think you must have a passion for : betrayel at it's worse not only of the wife but allso by the daughter and his brother,this story isn't the first on the same subject and it allways seem that the new wife is able to ment things
Matt you write very well to say the least tough i can't say that your personalities are very likeable,people divorce all the time and most given time get over it,the one thing in this story that bothers me most is the behaviour of the daughter,how she ended being a lawyer is a riddle to me,after being a junky she let her father take the fall for killing 3 people and shortly after that enrolling in law school and again turning on him and yet again at the wedding,she shows a few signs of psychopathic behaviour and poor intelligence
i gave it 4**** because of your writing abilitys
some real fucking garbage. how can any sane person think this crap is enjoyable to read. what kind of sick bastard gets his jollies off from this. i think i managed to read 1 page and i felt like punching someone. you know, i bet in real life your one of those assholes that live to piss people off. thats your goal in life, to annoy as many people as you can. are you a talented writer. yes you are. to bad your a sick little bastard.
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Anonymous01/26/16
Awful
Endless whining and hand wringing from the queen of wimps. MM stoops to a new low.
I mean I appreciate the effort but .. We're these characters really worth 22 pages ?
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Anonymous01/26/16
Every MM Tale ...
... and it might be a trademark or brand, has the Question " Whaddya Say ", and this is usually one of the turning points of the tale. Anyone ever notice that?
It's neither good nor bad, and I think this had three (maybe four) "whaddya"s up there. And Twenty-Two pages, !!! That made for a rather longish read.
Why would he sacrifice so much to people who don't care about him?
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Anonymous01/26/16
WHY GOD WHY???
I was seriously hoping you were dead and I wouldnt have to read another crap story written by you ever again.
Just accept your homosexuality man.
I know you older folks are supposed to be from a more conservative time, where everything was hidden, even if the things you folks did was horrible.
But in this time and age no one cares if u are gay, so go out proudly and suck some cock.
And please stop writing anymore crap.
What a bunch of horrible fucked up people..
Any decent man would have fucked the wife over in the divorce or at least broken all ties with them specially after the not bio-daughter's shitty attitude.
Bleed the fucking ex-brother in a lawsuit and then take off and make a better life for yourself while still young...
Yes, it was a bit too long, and the repeated disappearances by the main character got to be predictable. That's not good for a story. But for crying out loud, MM, get a proofreader. The missing letters and misplaced punctuation are annoying, and who the hell is daddy Henry?
All in all, though, it was a good tale, and the characters were well thought out. I half expected a DNA test to pop up showing David really was Jenna's father, but the writer remained in control and didn't stoop to that.
I give it a solid 4*.
Someone must have held a gun to their head and forced them to read this, since there's no other reason they would since they all claim to know exactly what a Matt Moreau story is. Same with the named commenters like Zed who are bitching about it.
Unless of course, as I've said, they secretly get off on these stories and so read them all. I bet with 22 pages they got off more than once, which is why they're so angry.
Now let's just get the morality police and tone police like pale and zed to tell me that anons never threaten or harass authors on here, or Luedon to explain why it's so inappropriate for me to be unkind towards those commenters while others tell authors to kill themselves or threaten to kill them.
A normal MM story, but as usual very well written and readable...However this story's main character may be resumed by what James said: ""That man is almost unreal, Aunt Delia. Un-freakin' real!"!!!! Of all his acts the one any father could understand and believe is the one he took the blame for "his" daughter...No matter the disrespect she showed him...Father's love speak always louder than any other...But even so, she had a lot more extenuating circumstances than him to kill those 3 men: She was drugged, raped several times during the night and she did it all under the influence of those drugs...What jury would condemn her? Saving his half-brother, the man that cuckolded him for 14 years, the husband of the woman that cheated him to the point of having her lover's child, that only a saint would have done it...The better end for this story would be Pope Francis to sanctify him...Why the need to save him? He had payed for his daughter sins, his daughter was already married, what was left for him? Let him die and make his cheating ex an unhappy woman, making her suffer a little...In the end he asked his new wife the one million dollar question: "I mean what if I hadn't taken the rap for Jenna. What if all I was able to do was offer my sympathy and give whatever moral support I could to her and them; and, what if I hadn't had the same exact blood type as Ronald? Would there have been any respect for me then?" and this question never was answered through all the 22 pages of this long story...And this has really ruined the story...Make he acting as he did never would got that answer...2*
The story did seem to degenerate a bit with the length, rather than build. I found the donation of the kidney to be excessive as well. You only need so many acts to be sainted.
A long story, and as Delia indicated one with generally selfish and stupid people. None of whom, including Delia could be trusted to even keep deep confidences.
As writing though, MM is a skilled author, and better than most on the site. His dialog is solid and his characters are distinct. This could have been much tighter, but giving it a 4, as it's good writing even if not to my taste.
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Anonymous01/26/16
and once again
the little prick frontSHIT is ranting against the evil anons who are responsible for all that is wrong in the world.
you will notice that the little troll didn't spend ONE WORD on the actual story on which he commented.
Wrong Zed fucktard.Read it but did not comment. Not worth it.Hey FLC Do you make it your life's work to piss off everyone? Authors included.God! What a sad little man you are.Did you read the story? Did you comment on it. Of course not. Much better to throw rocks at the anons that are ruining your life .Get a life FLC.Once again wrong Zed fucktard
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Anonymous01/26/16
Thank you, thank you, thank you! You saved me a huge waste of time.
Where would we be without the faithful commenters, all of you!! OK, not so much Bonnie and Vastie (You don't have to call her Bonnie, you can call her . . .). I got through the first chapter and realized I could spend the rest of the day trying to wade through this nonsense. I was going to say sewer, based on some of the comments, but I'm willing to wait until I see and smell it for myself. Just don't know when that is going to happen. I haven't been constipated enough to sit through 22 pages of the Moron Chronicles for a long time, but I will keep this bookmarked for when I need some serious sedation, or time killing.
The stupidity of your main character was revealed in the first paragraph: "But, the feelings one has for the love of his or her life never evaporates and has no limit, none." So, if your spouse drowns the kids in the bathtub because you wouldn't let him buy a new set of golf clubs, or her a new dress, your endless love would endure. In your case, probably so. I mean, kids from a marriage like that would be pretty much brain deal already. But there's more!
"I came along a year later, and joined my brother—a product of mom's first marriage—Ronald Carter completing the family Carter." So, is Ronald Carter the older brother, or is that you? But it can't be the older brother, since he came from a previous marriage, unless his dad was a Carter too? Or did Philby Carter adopt Ronald and give him his last name? I knew that if I was this confused by the second paragraph, by the end of 22 pages I would be ready to eat a revolver. Then I saw that the main cuck (Like who didn't know that was going to happen, its a MM story afterall) was David Carter. So at that point I read a little farther, just to see how much worse things could get.
"My brother was nine years older than me and he had my back from day one." So we now know who is going to be cucking David. And to seal the deal Matt tells us: "Physically, I was a little guy compared to my brother: he turned out to be six-two and a hard body; me, five-six, and slight of build." At this point Matt's fans are only wondering how big Ronald's cock is, and what it might feel like in their mouths, natch. We suspect David will be able to tell them soon enough, but God, how many pages further in? It takes a A Lot of pages to tell a story about a cock that BIG. But there's more!
"My earliest memory of Ronald and me goes back to my days in grammar school, fourth grade actually." But, you told us he had your back from day one. But you don't remember anything about Ronald until you were 8 or 9 years old? WTF? But there's more!!
But I'm already spent trying to make any sense out of this drek. Before the end of this first chapter we learn that Ronald is a screaming asshole and will fuck over brother David along with any number of blind delusional women who cannot see past his looks, his charm, his money, and especially his 10-inch cock, or whatever size it ends up being. I didn't get that far.
And if I ever end up convalescing from a serious illness and thereby get a chance to read the whole story I will be sure to apologize if I have mischaracterized this fine piece of writing. But if I trust the majority of the commenters, and I do, then while I may be wrong in the details, I'm right about the waste of time it would be to find out what the actual details are.
No rating, but most of everything of yours I have read deserve the scores they get.
22 pages! Really? And you can't even get to a 3?!!
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Anonymous01/26/16
Finally a new MM story
Matt, I am glad you are back. Have not read it yet but am looking forward to your unique style and perspective. Just wish it was shorter.
anon.1
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Anonymous01/26/16
Matt Moreau's story ?
No need to read.
Skip to the scoring and give a marvelous 1*
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Anonymous01/26/16
WOW
Matt is not so bad in little doses - he can be funny if you get past the fact that he writes the same story over and over - but 22 PAGES?! Thanks, but I think I'll pass.
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Anonymous01/26/16
22 pages of nothing
This could have all been said in 3. I gave you a # 1
I'm sure I've read this same story before, but it had a different ending.
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Anonymous01/26/16
Some of you need to get a life.
I don't understand how that some of you can hate an author so much but be willing to read or not read as the case may be the story just so you can slander someone or wish them ill. You really need to get a life. I believe that if you can be so critical of someone else so harshly that you need to write your own story to show us all how it is done since you guys are such experts.
I think that story was probably more true to life than a lot of us would be willing to admit in this day and age and more real than some of the unbelievable stories that are posted. But that is just the point. These are stories and most of the characters are not even real. Enjoy the story or not but remember that its just a story and you do not have to read it.
I think that it is a job well done. Keep up the good work.
I admit that I wasn't even going to try to read this story until I saw nonethewiser comment that he enjoyed it. He edited my last two stories and he edited some of Jezzaz's stories, who happens to be one if my favorite authors. So I decided to give it a try. However, I got as far as page two and had to stop. Knowing how many of MM's stories disappoint me, I felt it wise to not continue. I just couldn't read 22 pages of this poor guy getting fucked over.
Matt is an excellent writer. Because he is so good and his stories release such strong emotions, I didn't want to put myself through that. His stories have the ability to depress you for the rest of the day.
Therefore I didn't vote. I thought that was fair to MM.
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Anonymous01/26/16
I wish it was longer and had less sex.
I wish it was longer, way longer, a lot longer like 10x longer. I want to take it on vacation and spend all summer reading it.
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Anonymous01/26/16
1*
To long one, to stupid two. He would be dead three, and you made him a double wimp.
MCPO Jim
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Anonymous01/26/16
read the full thing
It was the same the whole way through. Selfish people wanting their way and the good guy not getting or given space and time to wrap his head around what was happening
English
22 pages?
I couldn't get passed the first page. He said, she said, he said, she said, etc, etc, etc. Damn, man, you have to use a little variety- all that, he said-she said gets real boring very quickly and there's no way I could contend with it for 22 pages.
MM writes the best betas, which is why
the closet cuckolds deride him so, way to close to home and way to close for comfort - same shame and denial for the thousands of cuckold stories they read voraciously and then rebuke.
Used Plot
I have already read story with the same plot, wife cheated with husband's brother ,got pregnant, husband thought it was his, then wife left him for his brother. The husband went to prison for 5 yrs after assaulting his brother. Daughter about to be married, problem as to who should walk with her to the altar, yada, yada, yada. Brother killed himself due to extreme guilt. But sad to say, that story is so much better than this. This is so awful.
22 pages too long! Couldn't finish the first page.
Appreciated the theme of the opus , but this was for hard core MM fans only
I've five starred 10 or more stories by Mr. Moreau but this won't be one of them. For short stories , it's possible to admire the quirky, pathetic/ poignant snapshots that are captured. At novella length , however, things get mawkish and redundant. I do agree with forgiveness granted for repentant trespasses but found execution of this worthy idea bloated and unwieldy in this fictional treatment by my standards.
One gift that still shines is how well this author looks at ( cheating ) love from both sides aka the cuck and bull ( the meandering wife as well ). ' The Bridge ' recently written by Richard Gerald was an excellent story but huge questions cc the characters were left due to that author's choice to stay strictly in first person narration.
This story started only dragging after Stacy and Ron became a conventional couple. Their POVs became mundane. I will say in terms of real life , cheaters who pair up after discarding their marriages rarely last as a couple according to surveys.
This was a lot of work. Matt Moreau has my admiration for following his muse. Personally, I think his limitations as a writer were exposed at this extended length. It doesn't matter though what we say. Because one thing this author and his fictional alter - egos have in common is they don't stop chasing their idiosyncratic goals because of popular opinion.
Jesus fucking Christ
I hoped you'd have killed yourself by now, you piece of shit.
Your writing is only getting worse. How the hell can you stand to look at yourself in the mirror?
Interesting premise..
MM....
You write a long story of "one sided love." It is plain to see the hero loves/hates his family for the wrongs they have done him. But the love is stronger and it drives him to help them even when EVERY THING inside of him says to let them suffer. This story took an hour to read, but the Character went through this for years. With that in mind I could see where he mellowed enough to get hurt again. The problem that I have is that his family did not love him back. It was truly one sided. To do the things and say the things they did...? It seemed to be out of a strange mix of guilt, indebtedness, grief, some fondness and a need for balance. In truth I think k he should have stayed away from them for they were all poison. But what you have done here is very accurately portray a scenario of "What ifs" with decisions I would never have made if I was in that situation. Are they realistic? I don't know and I pity any man who is able to tell me that they are from personal experience! You have written a story that will haunt me in a small way. I both want to thank you and flip you off at the same time. So...thanks...I think.
I give you a 5.
Sincerely,
Payenbrant
THE DE-PERSONIFICATION OF A GOOD MAN
and for them all to feel better he must give his own soul. TK U MLJ LV NV
I liked it
To me, this was an obvious reboot of Quinn and Kimberly Harris, which had one of the more interesting plots that Matt has written. This much deeper dive gave much more insight into the characters' perspectives. It made some of the more ridiculous plot lines more believable (though added a doozy or two). I did get repetitive, though. I think this deeper dive would have been deep enough if it was shorter.
I am also glad to see MM is back. I don't love everything he writes, but he has a style that makes for -usually- an easy read. Next time, though, how about a lot shorter.
Man, do you get some vitriol?
Great writing. The story wasn't to my tastes, but it was very well written and very full of complicated, conflicted characters... I really admire what you were able to put together.
That said, it would have been awesome if it had ended with Stacey finding out he was always cheating on her - the signs were definitely there throughout the "you're the only one for me" of those first 14 years, and later. I thought you were headed that way in what was the pre-cursor to the liver stuff, with the trouble peeing and such.
It would also have been great to find out at the end that Jenna was David's daughter after all and Stacey had her assumptions wrong. It would have been devastating to the whole family and put a major spin on the whole story, of being cuckolded, betrayed by sharing a daughter that turns out to be yours after all, and the man who thinks he's had to share his daughter with you turns out to have been an uncle after all. It just would have made a more complicated and tragic ending.
Stacey was a massively selfish bitch though.
The hatred is stupid
Somebody took a lot of time and effort to write something and offer it for us to read, free of charge. Disagree? Sure. Hate it and explain why? Absolutely? Have criticisms that you feel strongly about? Tell us. But the hatred of the author and vulgarity and wishing him ill? Grow the fuck up.
Missed you
Welcome back
Well...
I appreciate how much effort it took to put 22 pages into this story. When you factor in that typically (well, unless you are one of those that types one sentence paragraphs and includes plenty of line breaks) each page on Lit runs around 3600 words, this is well over the count for novel length fiction.
The rub comes from the fact that, until extremely late in the story, there were absolutely no redeeming characters. None. I know some people like to read stories like that, I mean if you like Faulkner this is probably right up your alley. It leaves the story flat, however, and that is one of the things that killed this story for me despite the aforementioned effort.
The first real character that I could feel anything for was James. Everyone else was despicable on one level or another. The protagonist was a milquetoast loser that was respected by no one. Certainly, they claimed to respect him, but none did. As James said, they all cried Crocodile tears at one point or another. All of them double-crossed him at some point, most repeatedly. They were supposedly not forgiven until the end, but all he ever did was do things for them. His brother was despicable, his first wife the same, his daughter only less so, and his aunt continued to spout from one head that she respected him beyond words, whilst the other head told him to suck it up. By the time he was gang-raped in prison he should have had no issue taking it up every orifice, because that is what he had been taking from everyone. Minor aside, how did he get gang raped when he was in the untouchable 'christian gang'?
I could go on with my disappointments, but as Inigo Montoya once said, "There is no time, allow me to sum up."
How do we, as the audience, balance the obvious effort involved in writing the story versus it's major plot issues and lack of a true villain/hero? I could give 5* for effort, but other than that it was a 1* story for me. In the end, I split the difference and rounded down. 2*
It's like MM decided to combine
ten stories into one since they are all the same anyway. "It's tough having a small dick and a wife that needs a big one." That theme has served MM for years.
typical
queen MM- 0*
total betrayal at all levels and they stay socialable, get real
the ending doesn't speak well for anyone in the story and Stacey from the get go was a round heeled slut. she knew Ron's history and got herself intentionally fucked by him. Great! 1* simply because it doesn't go lower.
1*
Supreme wimp loser VS supreme selfish brainless sneaky assholes.
MM really can write some awfully vile characters - well, they are always his usual stock characters, copy-pasted from one story to the next. And they all treat the poor loser dude like shit. And from start to finish, everyone keeps pushing the message that the poor fuck is in the wrong and that HE HAS TO GET OVER IT! Huh? What the fuck?
But, no worries! Evil will triumph in the end!
Welcome Back!
When I saw your name listed at a time in the morning that I should have stayed in bed, I smiled. It was such a welcome relief to know that I was not going to be reading a superman story, where super reeks vengeance over all who have crossed him. I enjoy your anti heroes doing their best in a world of rejection and coming out of it wearing the high ground.
I also love your toughness in ignoring the low brained detractors that comment. You have balls of steel and elephant thick skin. You are the man!
5 *****
I concur!
Welcome back.
Granted, looking at the comments, I will probably not appreciate your story and at 22 pages, I won't invest that kind of time into a story I won't enjoy, but you certainly have an audience and I am glad you continue to write.
And HOLY COW! Twenty Two pages? No wonder you haven't been around. That is almost novella size!
FUCK OFF
Go back to whatever hole you crawled out under you little bitch, the only people that even enjoy this sort of crap are bitches like your charaters so fuck you and them....just go away
5
for another great story rom MM Great LW story
1*
VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT TRANNY BITCH FOOL VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!
Yes a long story
It is smth i think you must have a passion for : betrayel at it's worse not only of the wife but allso by the daughter and his brother,this story isn't the first on the same subject and it allways seem that the new wife is able to ment things
Matt you write very well to say the least tough i can't say that your personalities are very likeable,people divorce all the time and most given time get over it,the one thing in this story that bothers me most is the behaviour of the daughter,how she ended being a lawyer is a riddle to me,after being a junky she let her father take the fall for killing 3 people and shortly after that enrolling in law school and again turning on him and yet again at the wedding,she shows a few signs of psychopathic behaviour and poor intelligence
i gave it 4**** because of your writing abilitys
1 *
some real fucking garbage. how can any sane person think this crap is enjoyable to read. what kind of sick bastard gets his jollies off from this. i think i managed to read 1 page and i felt like punching someone. you know, i bet in real life your one of those assholes that live to piss people off. thats your goal in life, to annoy as many people as you can. are you a talented writer. yes you are. to bad your a sick little bastard.
Awful
Endless whining and hand wringing from the queen of wimps. MM stoops to a new low.
A mixture of almost all of your story plots....
But it is entertaining even if I just can't identify with any of your characters.
22 pages..
I mean I appreciate the effort but .. We're these characters really worth 22 pages ?
Every MM Tale ...
... and it might be a trademark or brand, has the Question " Whaddya Say ", and this is usually one of the turning points of the tale. Anyone ever notice that?
It's neither good nor bad, and I think this had three (maybe four) "whaddya"s up there. And Twenty-Two pages, !!! That made for a rather longish read.
Score of .. 5, as usual.
Painful, exaggerated, almost unbearable. 5*
Why?
Why would he sacrifice so much to people who don't care about him?
WHY GOD WHY???
I was seriously hoping you were dead and I wouldnt have to read another crap story written by you ever again.
Just accept your homosexuality man.
I know you older folks are supposed to be from a more conservative time, where everything was hidden, even if the things you folks did was horrible.
But in this time and age no one cares if u are gay, so go out proudly and suck some cock.
And please stop writing anymore crap.
What a bunch of horrible fucked up people..
Any decent man would have fucked the wife over in the divorce or at least broken all ties with them specially after the not bio-daughter's shitty attitude.
Bleed the fucking ex-brother in a lawsuit and then take off and make a better life for yourself while still young...
_Wes.
Lost one star for annoying me
Yes, it was a bit too long, and the repeated disappearances by the main character got to be predictable. That's not good for a story. But for crying out loud, MM, get a proofreader. The missing letters and misplaced punctuation are annoying, and who the hell is daddy Henry?
All in all, though, it was a good tale, and the characters were well thought out. I half expected a DNA test to pop up showing David really was Jenna's father, but the writer remained in control and didn't stoop to that.
I give it a solid 4*.
The poor anons
Someone must have held a gun to their head and forced them to read this, since there's no other reason they would since they all claim to know exactly what a Matt Moreau story is. Same with the named commenters like Zed who are bitching about it.
Unless of course, as I've said, they secretly get off on these stories and so read them all. I bet with 22 pages they got off more than once, which is why they're so angry.
Now let's just get the morality police and tone police like pale and zed to tell me that anons never threaten or harass authors on here, or Luedon to explain why it's so inappropriate for me to be unkind towards those commenters while others tell authors to kill themselves or threaten to kill them.
A normal MM story, but...
A normal MM story, but as usual very well written and readable...However this story's main character may be resumed by what James said: ""That man is almost unreal, Aunt Delia. Un-freakin' real!"!!!! Of all his acts the one any father could understand and believe is the one he took the blame for "his" daughter...No matter the disrespect she showed him...Father's love speak always louder than any other...But even so, she had a lot more extenuating circumstances than him to kill those 3 men: She was drugged, raped several times during the night and she did it all under the influence of those drugs...What jury would condemn her? Saving his half-brother, the man that cuckolded him for 14 years, the husband of the woman that cheated him to the point of having her lover's child, that only a saint would have done it...The better end for this story would be Pope Francis to sanctify him...Why the need to save him? He had payed for his daughter sins, his daughter was already married, what was left for him? Let him die and make his cheating ex an unhappy woman, making her suffer a little...In the end he asked his new wife the one million dollar question: "I mean what if I hadn't taken the rap for Jenna. What if all I was able to do was offer my sympathy and give whatever moral support I could to her and them; and, what if I hadn't had the same exact blood type as Ronald? Would there have been any respect for me then?" and this question never was answered through all the 22 pages of this long story...And this has really ruined the story...Make he acting as he did never would got that answer...2*
Wow. Folk just have a hate-on for MM.
The story did seem to degenerate a bit with the length, rather than build. I found the donation of the kidney to be excessive as well. You only need so many acts to be sainted.
A long story, and as Delia indicated one with generally selfish and stupid people. None of whom, including Delia could be trusted to even keep deep confidences.
As writing though, MM is a skilled author, and better than most on the site. His dialog is solid and his characters are distinct. This could have been much tighter, but giving it a 4, as it's good writing even if not to my taste.
and once again
the little prick frontSHIT is ranting against the evil anons who are responsible for all that is wrong in the world.
you will notice that the little troll didn't spend ONE WORD on the actual story on which he commented.
LITTLE FLAMER ASSHOLE.
Hey FLC
Wrong Zed fucktard.Read it but did not comment. Not worth it.Hey FLC Do you make it your life's work to piss off everyone? Authors included.God! What a sad little man you are.Did you read the story? Did you comment on it. Of course not. Much better to throw rocks at the anons that are ruining your life .Get a life FLC.Once again wrong Zed fucktard
Thank you, thank you, thank you! You saved me a huge waste of time.
Where would we be without the faithful commenters, all of you!! OK, not so much Bonnie and Vastie (You don't have to call her Bonnie, you can call her . . .). I got through the first chapter and realized I could spend the rest of the day trying to wade through this nonsense. I was going to say sewer, based on some of the comments, but I'm willing to wait until I see and smell it for myself. Just don't know when that is going to happen. I haven't been constipated enough to sit through 22 pages of the Moron Chronicles for a long time, but I will keep this bookmarked for when I need some serious sedation, or time killing.
The stupidity of your main character was revealed in the first paragraph: "But, the feelings one has for the love of his or her life never evaporates and has no limit, none." So, if your spouse drowns the kids in the bathtub because you wouldn't let him buy a new set of golf clubs, or her a new dress, your endless love would endure. In your case, probably so. I mean, kids from a marriage like that would be pretty much brain deal already. But there's more!
"I came along a year later, and joined my brother—a product of mom's first marriage—Ronald Carter completing the family Carter." So, is Ronald Carter the older brother, or is that you? But it can't be the older brother, since he came from a previous marriage, unless his dad was a Carter too? Or did Philby Carter adopt Ronald and give him his last name? I knew that if I was this confused by the second paragraph, by the end of 22 pages I would be ready to eat a revolver. Then I saw that the main cuck (Like who didn't know that was going to happen, its a MM story afterall) was David Carter. So at that point I read a little farther, just to see how much worse things could get.
"My brother was nine years older than me and he had my back from day one." So we now know who is going to be cucking David. And to seal the deal Matt tells us: "Physically, I was a little guy compared to my brother: he turned out to be six-two and a hard body; me, five-six, and slight of build." At this point Matt's fans are only wondering how big Ronald's cock is, and what it might feel like in their mouths, natch. We suspect David will be able to tell them soon enough, but God, how many pages further in? It takes a A Lot of pages to tell a story about a cock that BIG. But there's more!
"My earliest memory of Ronald and me goes back to my days in grammar school, fourth grade actually." But, you told us he had your back from day one. But you don't remember anything about Ronald until you were 8 or 9 years old? WTF? But there's more!!
But I'm already spent trying to make any sense out of this drek. Before the end of this first chapter we learn that Ronald is a screaming asshole and will fuck over brother David along with any number of blind delusional women who cannot see past his looks, his charm, his money, and especially his 10-inch cock, or whatever size it ends up being. I didn't get that far.
And if I ever end up convalescing from a serious illness and thereby get a chance to read the whole story I will be sure to apologize if I have mischaracterized this fine piece of writing. But if I trust the majority of the commenters, and I do, then while I may be wrong in the details, I'm right about the waste of time it would be to find out what the actual details are.
No rating, but most of everything of yours I have read deserve the scores they get.
22 pages! Really? And you can't even get to a 3?!!
Finally a new MM story
Matt, I am glad you are back. Have not read it yet but am looking forward to your unique style and perspective. Just wish it was shorter.
anon.1
Matt Moreau's story ?
No need to read.
Skip to the scoring and give a marvelous 1*
WOW
Matt is not so bad in little doses - he can be funny if you get past the fact that he writes the same story over and over - but 22 PAGES?! Thanks, but I think I'll pass.
22 pages of nothing
This could have all been said in 3. I gave you a # 1
Wow
That really was a waste of time that I'll never get back.
nope
Dropped the ball in the last two chapters.
Same Story - Different Ending
I'm sure I've read this same story before, but it had a different ending.
Some of you need to get a life.
I don't understand how that some of you can hate an author so much but be willing to read or not read as the case may be the story just so you can slander someone or wish them ill. You really need to get a life. I believe that if you can be so critical of someone else so harshly that you need to write your own story to show us all how it is done since you guys are such experts.
I think that story was probably more true to life than a lot of us would be willing to admit in this day and age and more real than some of the unbelievable stories that are posted. But that is just the point. These are stories and most of the characters are not even real. Enjoy the story or not but remember that its just a story and you do not have to read it.
I think that it is a job well done. Keep up the good work.
I was going to try, but I punked out.
I admit that I wasn't even going to try to read this story until I saw nonethewiser comment that he enjoyed it. He edited my last two stories and he edited some of Jezzaz's stories, who happens to be one if my favorite authors. So I decided to give it a try. However, I got as far as page two and had to stop. Knowing how many of MM's stories disappoint me, I felt it wise to not continue. I just couldn't read 22 pages of this poor guy getting fucked over.
Matt is an excellent writer. Because he is so good and his stories release such strong emotions, I didn't want to put myself through that. His stories have the ability to depress you for the rest of the day.
Therefore I didn't vote. I thought that was fair to MM.
I wish it was longer and had less sex.
I wish it was longer, way longer, a lot longer like 10x longer. I want to take it on vacation and spend all summer reading it.
1*
To long one, to stupid two. He would be dead three, and you made him a double wimp.
MCPO Jim
read the full thing
It was the same the whole way through. Selfish people wanting their way and the good guy not getting or given space and time to wrap his head around what was happening
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