All Comments on 'Deflowering Alice ... and Me'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Nice story

Sex is better without condoms.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Good job

Great story. Yes sex is better without a condom, but a hell of a lot riskier. Now if it pure fiction she could have said Im on the pill, but the story went toward the responsible direction.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago

Great story

Privates1stClassPrivates1stClassabout 8 years ago
Valentine's gifts...

are better when they're delivered in the horizontal position--and shared between a young man and a young woman. :)

Good luck in the contest.

AverygoodlayAverygoodlayabout 8 years ago
Sweet

Romantic story of young love, well written and enough truth to make it a real first time.

barepussloverbarepussloverabout 8 years ago
Sweet !

Responsible Sex! Very Believable. :-)

joelafayettejoelafayetteabout 8 years ago
Good, short and sweet

I could use more descriptions and a longer sex part though. Elaborate.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Fantastic story

Loved it!!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
nice one

its true that first timer guys shoots the second they were touched. wonderful job excellent story.

zephyrsmanzephyrsmanabout 8 years ago
Nice Story

Really nice story. I know it's a Valentine's Day story, but at least one follow-up chapter would be sweet. Thanks, and keep them coming.

greenparrotgreenparrotalmost 3 years ago

This story moves at a glacial pace. Plus it is lacking in sex. Too much talk.

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