You write well, but way too short. There was great opportunity for teasing here if you don't want to get into actual sexual activities. I'd suggest you build a bit more before submititng the next installment.
good start... i loved the teaser about the mum spending a tad bit extra time on his anus..... will wait for more
by
Anonymous02/04/16
Bad comments
Yes the formats been done before but is there any reason for the sort of rude comments already made? I think not, readers, this person has taken the time to write a story, if you don't like it then move on but keep your rude comments to yourselves.
So, yeah, this has been done before, but it is a possible situation and if handled properly can be very nice. Here we have a slow build-up, with emphasis on the embarrassment of the situation, but things seem to be progressing nicely, and I can hardly wait til mom goes off for her trip, and sister Cathy starts comparing her brother with her boyfriends - to the detriment of the boyfriends, perhaps? We'll see. Not a bad start, and let's see what happens.
many times,which not the problem it ended to quickly that's the problem didn't even get to day 2 #ComeOnMan Next chapter ASAP & make it at least a page longer even if you decide to make it a series
good start you have chosen a line that has been done before SO WHAT who cares, if a story is well written and keeps the reader interested then it has possibilities. never let the hidden people that never try to express their thoughts other than to say dumb things about how dumb a story line is. REMEMBER YOU are the author and you are attempting to put your thoughts to page. good job and proceed keep me interested see i do not hide behind anonymous
Ignore the comments about the unoriginal story line. Very few stories here are really original. If you take the time to develop the characters and develop some sexual tension between the family members this could be a good story. But if you rush things and just make it a "wham bam thanks maam" story then you're no better than all the copycats.
by
Anonymous02/05/16
CONTINUE!!!
Great start but please continue this story, hopefully him and his sister Carly have hot sex and maybe eventually include mom!
by
Anonymous02/05/16
great
Please continue this story
by
Anonymous02/05/16
too short
its a good start, but dam im getting tired of starting a good read and it end before it gets started. wish more writers would have more patience and get the job done before submitting it.
by
Anonymous02/05/16
you stopped
when the story was starting...did your momma have to assist you or what...you only got one star because of ending the story before it started
by
Anonymous02/06/16
My mom fell off a ladder and broke her wrists.
I had to shower her because she had no use of her hands either. When I was soaping up her breasts, her nipples got very hard, and it got me hard. When I was washing her pubic area, I unconsciously rubbed her pussy lips and clit causing her to moan.
English
Good build up
A very good start and a lot of potential for future chapters. Keep them coming.
Great start
But way to short.
If you're going to tease, TEASE!
You write well, but way too short. There was great opportunity for teasing here if you don't want to get into actual sexual activities. I'd suggest you build a bit more before submititng the next installment.
5/5
good start... i loved the teaser about the mum spending a tad bit extra time on his anus..... will wait for more
Bad comments
Yes the formats been done before but is there any reason for the sort of rude comments already made? I think not, readers, this person has taken the time to write a story, if you don't like it then move on but keep your rude comments to yourselves.
So, Yeah
So, yeah, this has been done before, but it is a possible situation and if handled properly can be very nice. Here we have a slow build-up, with emphasis on the embarrassment of the situation, but things seem to be progressing nicely, and I can hardly wait til mom goes off for her trip, and sister Cathy starts comparing her brother with her boyfriends - to the detriment of the boyfriends, perhaps? We'll see. Not a bad start, and let's see what happens.
read same story
many times,which not the problem it ended to quickly that's the problem didn't even get to day 2 #ComeOnMan Next chapter ASAP & make it at least a page longer even if you decide to make it a series
hey Tony
good start you have chosen a line that has been done before SO WHAT who cares, if a story is well written and keeps the reader interested then it has possibilities. never let the hidden people that never try to express their thoughts other than to say dumb things about how dumb a story line is. REMEMBER YOU are the author and you are attempting to put your thoughts to page. good job and proceed keep me interested see i do not hide behind anonymous
Very few original stories on this site
Ignore the comments about the unoriginal story line. Very few stories here are really original. If you take the time to develop the characters and develop some sexual tension between the family members this could be a good story. But if you rush things and just make it a "wham bam thanks maam" story then you're no better than all the copycats.
CONTINUE!!!
Great start but please continue this story, hopefully him and his sister Carly have hot sex and maybe eventually include mom!
great
Please continue this story
too short
its a good start, but dam im getting tired of starting a good read and it end before it gets started. wish more writers would have more patience and get the job done before submitting it.
you stopped
when the story was starting...did your momma have to assist you or what...you only got one star because of ending the story before it started
My mom fell off a ladder and broke her wrists.
I had to shower her because she had no use of her hands either. When I was soaping up her breasts, her nipples got very hard, and it got me hard. When I was washing her pubic area, I unconsciously rubbed her pussy lips and clit causing her to moan.
Good Read***
Thanks for sharing.
thanks for
.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Helping Hands or
More submissions by Tony_Martin.