Mommy's Butt Chocolates

Butt chocolates

I'm wondering whether those butt chocolates actually tasted of chocolate.

After all, little piggies love chocolate.

Absolute yack...

Don't do anything for me ..Apart from making me feel sick

Title says it all.

I should have known that a story with a title such as this was likely to be a low-quality one, but come on. Awful grammar issues, misspellings (know instead of no? How do you mess that up?!) and a generally weak storyline - mother walks in to her obese daughter crying (oh yes, she's obese - the author refers to her weight about 5 times in the first few paragraphs) and randomly licks her tears from her fingers, despite no evidence of any previous sexual engagement.

I gave up even trying to read this.

Thanks for the warning

Between the title, and your cautionary that the story features scat, I just skipped to the bottom to give you the single star that a shitty story like this one deserves.

This is a piece of quality writing. It drops a log on tradtional storytelling, transcending time and space.

The following line is poetry, on par with work by Lord Byron:
"Hillary spit a mouthful of saliva into her Mother's ass, then wrapped her lips around her rectum and sucked causing the turd to slide down."

No limits for sure...

Okay, I must really thank you for the warning. Not the genre I prefer... not at all.
Genre aside, if I were in your place, I'd work on storytelling, because I believe even a shit eating can be described in more acceptable fashion. You know - character development, good plot, style...
On other hand, if you add shit-eating to a good plot, I still don't know about that. Well... good luck with your... umm... fetishes.

Maybe changing to Nowritingtalentstoryteller

Is it simply the fact that you don't care which prevents you from improving your writing with a story which has someone edit it?

Great Story

I love this story because it is so unique. Most stories on here are cookie cutter stories where the characters are hot looking and doing nothing more than the old in and out. This story the characters are real, and they are doing really nasty shit. I hope to read more from this author.

Don't quit your day job.

I was able to overlook the theme and somehow managed to suffer through the story even though it was repulsive to me. "To each his own kink" is my way of thinking.

HOWEVER...you have been submitting stories here for more than two years and this reads and looks like something a junior high kid who has skipped most all of his English classes would come up with as his first "dirty story." Glaring grammar mistakes and unbelievable spelling errors. A hodge-podge plot with writing that violates almost every standard and acceptable practice. This isn't cutting edge, it just is cutting. And that is painful to read.

I gave it a two only because I feel any effort deserves that much. But if you are going to keep submitting stories, at least get a beta reader or someone to help you edit them. Please!

The burnt forest

Dear Author,i would care to inform you that the use of fecal matter in this story was not on point. E.g when Hillary broke off a piece of her fallen tree and inserted it into her daughter's scrumptous mouth,why did you not elaberate on the scene and break the full hot sticky chocolate fudge cake off into her puffy mouth? I would also care to add that this story,in my humble opinion had too much licking of the brown starfish (no offence if thats your thing). This post is constructive criticism as you clearly know best as the author.