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Moving Linda Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous02/11/16

GET AN EDITOR!!!

Your standard of writing is around that of a 14 year old schoolboy!
For instance, in the fourth paragraph - "When I lost my wife 3+ years ago to a heart attack." This 'sentence' is incomplete and meaningless!
Or, how about the last 'sentence'?
" I'm know I'm looking forward to it."
Pathetic!!!

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by grabmyballs02/13/16

Nice People

I thought your characters are nice people. I can easily imagine them in my life. I would love to read more about them. Frankly, I was a little put off by the comment that could only see grammar or spelling issues; I figured out your intent, I'm sure. So find a friendly editor. No big deal. Keep up the good work.

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by unclebeardy03/21/16

It read like a first draft

Potentially a good story, but poorly written in this version.

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