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AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Poor

No build up and straight to the action make its boring

jrdrumsjrdrumsabout 8 years agoAuthor
Thanks for the feedback

Thanks for the feedback. This was my first attempt at a story. This one was just written out as the fantasy unfolded.

bdsmbillbdsmbillabout 8 years ago
Needs more proofing

Lots of issues, particularly with tense constantly shifting.

jrdrumsjrdrumsabout 8 years agoAuthor
Thanks for the feedback

I do appreciate the feedback. The next two had a bit more development.

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