Into the Fire Ch. 01

Please Continue

This is off to a great start but please don't wait 20 years to post the next chapter. I'm interested to see where this story goes

OK, the beginning...

Parents are not concerned, money thrown at the problem of getting around and no one to call on. A fireman answers the call of a caretaker. Why is the fireman doing this? Did he hit her or see the actual accident? Who was at fault? Why would he just volunteer to help her? Is he a new firefighter?

I'm sorry to bombard you with questions, but this is my thought process after reading stories. Good start, but need more info to give this story teeth.

Awesomeness!

This is a great start. Please update soon!

Great beginning!

I love what you have given us so far. Can't wait to read more.

Pretty

Stupid, actually to the point of being unbelievable.

5

for content and effort and to say fuck you in your ass dear annony you fucking fag

Short but interesting start

We'll see where you take it. 3*

Nice start!!!

Great start but I'm left with so many questions? Hopefully the next installment gives us background info on Shane and Tessa. Very interested to see where you take us.....

Meh, feels like I've read it before.

can't wait for more!

Nice start, hate her parents already, mother especially!

promising start

i'm intrigued. excited for the next chapters

Hmmmm

Story seem like it could be great

Advice

The story sounds great so far and I just have some advice for possible future sex scenes. Please for the love of all things original, don't put in the "reaching places I never knew existed" line. It was cool when it was first used but now I see it everywhere and it's just. .......no. Completely overused. Everything else sounds pretty interesting so far and I hope you can continue it.

Well...

Decent start... But the ending felt rather rushed and quite unrealistic. The fact that she agrees to stay with this stranger after 5 minutes of contemplation is just... Not very believable (though she did just suffer a concussion lol). The plot so far seems like it has the potential to get really cheesy and predictable but I'm excited to see where you take this story nonetheless! I'll be here for the next installment!

hmm

.....living with a stranger.. got me stuck a bit but yeahh