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Looks like the beginning of a series. But your plot is off kilter since it ignores human nature, and atheism..
Jenny loves Nick, is carrying Nick's child, and is horny as hell. So why does Hazel think moving her sister in will make the relationship between Jenny and Nick weaker? Either Nick and the two sisters will all come to love and want each other more, or Jenny and Nick will get closer while Hazel becomes jealous and distant. It is implausible that Jenny and Nick will come to dislike each other, they've known each other for years. And now they share a child.
But let's be honest, if there is no God, then there is no soul, so the life of an unborn child has no inherent value or status if the mother does not want it. So why doesn't Jenny just get an abortion? Ugly, but realistic. It would follow from your plot and character profiles that Jenny wants Nick's baby, and Hazel appears to support Jenny's wish. Moving her in will really cement a 3-way relationship, or probably destroy one of those relationships. I just wonder if you are up to writing that story.
Maybe a part 2 wasn't a good idea...
Maybe a part 2 wasn't a good idea...The problem in this part 2 was: Sure he should have come clean with his wife about what happened...As soon as he found out the woman was his in-law...But in this part 2 no one (not even his wife) said or took any action about her sister: she knew from the first second that it was him and no other man...And she didn't said anything and cheated on her sister...And even after knowing she was pregnat she didn't took any action: like abortion...No she chose to have the child, a single mother already with one daughter...So all the guilty was put on his shoulders and none in the sister's...Is this fair? Didn't he felt himself wronged and condemn for an act that the only error he did was not to come clean as soon as he found out? Soon or later this arrangement will destroy someone...Last: Shouldn't she be saying the following to her sister and not to her husband: "But make no mistake, if you put your pussy in my husband again, there will be hell to pay."? 2*
Nice sequel
Tied up some loose ends and teased us about what might possibly happen next. Poor old Nick has his hands full! Five star story-telling!
Fascinating question
The tail end of the story raises a fascinating question. A wife permits her husband to share his love between her and another woman (in this case her sister), but not to have penetrative sex with the other woman. Why not? What difference would penetration make?
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Cute and entertaining!
I really liked it -- 5*
Nice story
Well wrien, thoughtful tale. I love it. xoxoxox Annette
This really seems to be a setup for chapter 3
Is there some major holiday at the start of August or end of July? This really seems to be setting up some continuation for when the kids are born.
Very enjoyable and fun. Thanks.
Great Follow-Up
Like the idea Nick is under the Gun but it would seem a 3rd Chapter should be forth coming. What happens when they Live together. Sister's can be Allies or Enemy's at the same time. Making it tough on Nick.
Thank you.
It's been said there are only 14 different plots in Loving Wives and they have all been done to death. Thanks for proving them wrong.
As a statistics instructor let me assure you
oppinion polls don't "confirm" a damn thing. Polls indicate that a vast majority of people belive in a god even if they aren't religious.
Stats instructor
I am sorry but I completely disagree. People do not believe in God in the Christian world as they actually use it for covenience rather than real belief. Other relegions, seem much more extreme and I would gather that your stats may be true. However in my opinion relegion is the root of all evil. So many killed in the name of relegion, something that was invented in the prehistoric days to keep the masses down. No place in the modern world. This world WILL NEVER move on until relegion disappears.
Re this story, excellent and 4*
So far I like this series...
Poor guy doesn't have a clue. His best course of action for the next thirty years will be to always say, "Yes dear." Will be interesting if Hazel lets Jenny and him push out another rug rat or two. Five stars from me!
Stats Brouha of the Commentariat
A nice story; but the cast of commenters has gone off the rails like the clown troupe at last Saturday's SC debate. It does not help to apply U.S. stats to a UK story. FYI, "belief in god" runs at 37% in UK (about like the author suggested) and 27% in France; whereas across the whole EU, it is 51%. Meantime, the U.S. has some discrepancy between those who claim generalized belief in god at 89% and those who feel "certain of god" at only 63%. Obviously, the U.S. has higher religiosity than Europe but its older European-American population is trending toward Europe; it is the new immigrants, especially from Mexico, Central America, and Africa that slow the trend due to their high religiosity.
Seems illogical and unbelievable
That Hazel would be so accepting of the fact that her husband has impregnated both sisters. I'm thinking he shouldn't be sleeping under the same roof with her if he values his dick. Just too improbable a story to be any good.
1 star.
Not bad
I read the comments before the story, and thought this had something to do with God and/or atheism. It's funny how readers can (and do) hyper-focus on a throwaway line.
This is a very well-written story with a unique plot, but I found the ending to be less than satisfying. The whole situation was resolved in a way that was a little too neat and clean to be believable. There would have been far more angst and drama if this happened in real life (although I'm guessing this has probably never happened in human history, so we'll never know.)
Still, it's a good effort, and much appreciated.
Fun story
The plot was a natural extension of the previous story. The characters are not really very attractive.... not enough details.
An interesting start, if a bit newsy and breezy, rather than involved and....
.....delving more into the characterization. It seemed to me that many of the explanations for actions were "brush offs", not really addressing the question with a complete answer, but throwing back an abbreviated, even terse response to avoid really addressing the underlying concerns.
Maybe that's another difference between British writers and their culture and American writers and their culture.....but I'd like to get to know each of the three main characters a little more, before we're dealing with two squawking babies, two exhausted mothers and one deeply distraught and overwhelmed father of said babies........so that if they end up in a polygamous marriage or just the three of them cohabitating as a "newsagent" family, we'll at least be able to relate to them and their motivations. Same thought if they go their separate ways or if it ends with acrimony.....
I appreciate your care in your writing/editing, as I can offer no complaint about any of that. My grasp of the Queen's English, may not be as complete as it should be, so I cannot speak to that with much authority. But it is simpler to say there was nothing noteworthy to criticize you for in the spelling, punctuation, or grammar....allowances made for the obvious differences.
Thank you...looking forward to the next installment.
I'm Torn
One part of me agrees with those who claim that it goes against human nature for Hazel to accept what happened.
The other part says that she DOES love both her husband and her sister, and what happened IS believable.
In any case, it's pretty obvious that her sister carries most of the blame, since SHE knew what was happening, and could have put a stop to it before it went to far, and bringing her into the home is CERTAINLY a mistake!
A querky plot, but not very good closure. The real story is just beginning where you ended it!
So we know how they got into this predicament, but how does it all resolve? You have an odd habit of leaving out some of the most compelling and interesting parts of your stories. Lack of imagination, or just a short attention span?
You certainly have more talent than your stories contain.
THIS IS A REVERSAL
here we put the Hen in the Fox Abode. TK U MLJ LV NV
Hmmmm.....
Sooner or later things would probably change as their would be way too much temptation for it not to break down inhibitions.
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