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by sandspike02/16/04

can you explain this poem

I like the way it reads but it seems to be 2 poems in one.
It is like my present followed by youth.

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by jthserra02/17/04

Some interesting images...

but I have some difficulty seeing the connection between the first stanza and the rest of the poem. I may be missing something, but it seemed like 2 poems, the second was very good. Combined I am a bit befuddled.

jim :)

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by 02/18/04

Fantastic imagery

My favorite part:
"we jump off splintered docks
iron oxide nail stains
tannic acid brown skin
tastes of fish milt
released over egg masses..."

I think this is the strongest section of your poem because it paints a particularly sharp visual.

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