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What is the message therapy of which you talk?
Do they give hand relief by sms? So apart from the odd word problem the story has some promise. The writing style is not my favourite but that does not mean it's the same for all readers. I particularly dislike the abrupt ending, my problem also.
Agree
Agree about the abrupt ending. Also, can you not spell check. Massage, not "message".
Page 1 of the story only?
This reads like the very start of the story. Should have been much more, possibly several pages just to start. She certainly is not getting closer to her mom, only her mom's boy friend. Can't really rate without more to go by.
Proof reading
The writer obviously didn't bother reading the story before posting it. But then, perhaps there is such a thing as "message therapy", and the use of "massage" was an error that was missed in proof reading.
More
Good start. I'd love to read more!
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