The Link

Amazing

This is great, amazing, awesome. I had to finish it in one go. Just one little thing, it should be in Sc-Fi category, just so that it reaches more fans.

I will never forgive you

if you let her become evil - or if you kill any one of the 3.

The link

As good as any I have read, and I love sci-fi.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com

Wow one of your best! 5 stars!

It should be in the scifi catagory, but this is some of the best writing I've seen in a while. They should set up a PayPal tip jar for authors such as yourself. This is commercial quality writing.

Re anonymous.

She has known the true love of her parents, so she can never be evil.
Plus she is an empath, empathy precludes evil.

Loved it but ....

Why? Why end it like that 😕 Now I have to wait 😫 But to be honest I cannot wait to hear Teegans side ☺️

Simply amazing

The story had a good flow......,,once I started reading I couldn't allow myself to stop.5 stars aren't enough...please write a sequel to this story.
Thank you so much.

Might be your best to date

You are the one author on here that I check on to see if something new is published. I've enjoyed every one of your publicationson here but this one finally got me to write a comment.

This was excellent!

Fuck me.

Amazing. I cried. I cheered. I felt their exultation from here.

wow

every time I read your new story, i think its the best on lit, but u always keep topping yourself

More sci-fi than romance but still a good read

Thank you for another great story. I enjoyed it immensely. There were times when I felt my heart racing as I read, waiting to see what the outcome would be. I will patiently wait for the sequel and hope you continue to write other stories as well.

Yoshi

Amazing

I have always loved your romance tales. They are among the best in this site. This story mixes my two favorite genres. Will Be waiting for the next part.

Loved the plot

Again a wonderful story from your hand, thank you so much!
The plot reminded me of an older story in Literotica named "Death by Fucking" - an illchosen name to a good story about gifted children with special responsibilities.
That series died a sudden death when the gifted children had to solve a world climate crisis that the author wasn't gifted enough to find a way through.
Please don't fall into that trap!

For now, a 5 seems only adequate. Where's the tip jar?

Get a publisher

Damn. Part 2?

Wow!

Thank you for a great novel!

Not impressed

It was simply boring!

Like your comments dear annony boring likeyou!!!!

I gave it a 5

Once again...

Once again, you've impressed me. I don't know how you continue to come up with these stories, and make the as engaging as you do, but I can't stop reading your writing. Unbelievable character development, and the twists and turns of your stories continue to astound me. Thank you for this story. I look forward to continuing chapters.

thank you

for this masterpiece. i really enjoyed reading it.

Outstanding

as usual. Really clever premise, great writing. As always, thanks.....

Not boring, blockbuster!

Your plot, story development, character development were all excellent. I couldn't stop reading. The dialogue and internal dialogues were terrific. Even the moral question of creating this type of being were well thought out and balanced. The sex and love were a great spice to the story and I liked how you wove in the family aspect of finding time for intimacy. Keep writing, either a sequel to this and/or other stories. You have a gift. Please share as much and as often as you can.
- Excellent Story!

Book deal?

You need to be published! I could not stop reading!

What a story!

I thought "The Mountain" was good, but this surpasses it.
I couldn't put it down until I had read it all.
One or two minor typos but they didn't detract from the story. Can't wait for the second part.
I am eager to see how she grows and gains control of her abilities and the choices she makes to use them.
Keep up the good work.

I can't believe you're getting better

For some time you have been the best writer on this site. I can't believe you're actually getting better. Thank you for the privilege of reading your work.

BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN

Is all I can truly say....you have done an excellent job on this story, and I hope you continue it. It is original and very unique. I have honestly enjoy myself from the beginning to the end. Thank You

Quite a contrast

with your other usual tearjerkers, but a welcome one nontheless.
I loved the almost sci-fy ish story. I can't say I've ever heard or read of the telemotions, if you will.
"If young Stinky don't trust you, I'm gonna shoot you"

I hope it wasn't just me experiencing delusions...

but was there a whole section where you couldn't make up your mind what you were calling Abigail...?

And I can't help but wonder... If Teegan shared with almost everyone that she loved Sam so much, did she share WHY...? I mean, people still seem stunned by the fact she does...

And can't help but think... It's not like people will remain unchanged for the full fifty thousand years and then suddenly Bam! complete change to how Teegan is... So I wonder if Sam is just a step closer already resulting in some of that extra love...

Oh my

The entire premise is thought-provoking. The writing is top notch. The character development is believable. A first class story. Needs... more. Yeah, just more....
PLEASE!

Amazing!

The only word I can think of. I thought I was reading a published novel. You have a blessed talent, and the love scenes were nicely done, without resorting to what is usually found on this site. Exceedingly well done. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Excellent story

Very well done. I got lost in the story and can't wait until we get to meet a teenager. I guess that means the family survived potty training both kids. I'm curious as to a short treatment of how the kids handle adolescence together. Great read😀

Love

This story is very, very good. You could have ended it simply by deleting the epilogue.
But this gives us something to look forward to. Now you have me dangling preps.

You still have problems with apostrophes in possessives and plurals, and you dangle prepositions. There are a few other little errors. Oh, and you are confused about to and too, too.

A wonderful piece. The inclusion of God is so appropriate and welcome. I would have enjoyed a longer discourse on the connection of love and the experience of God.

Wrong category

This belongs in novels and novellas. It's not a bad story. Just doesn't belong here

Deserves more then five stars

Given a story this good for free makes me really wonder about some of the pithy comments. This story is Really two good too miss, kudos DreamCloud.

wonderful story

I've enjoyed all your works. This story was exceptional. Looking forward to your next submission. Thanks

Top Flight

Top flight story. Well thought out and written. Waiting for the followup.

Chef d'oeuvre :-

Gifted author! Suggest choosing a film director carefully, and not just anybody - a few typos to be corrected beforehand.
Btw, one can see the person behind a writer's "pen", and I certainly like the person who wrote this story - sort of one-way bonding ;-)

Just when I thought you couldn't get better...

After reading "Rehab" I was prepared for disappointment. Was I wrong! This is publishable work. I am grateful I was given the gift you gave me here. I'm looking forward to reading your other stories. I don't care what category they are tagged with.

Magical

It's simply unbelievably magical.

Love but......

I absolutely love your stories! You are a literary marvel but the way you end them so abruptly makes me want to brain you!

Thank you!

Thank you!
Excuse me for being greedy, but I want to read about Teegan and her quest for a Prom date! lol

WOW

One of the best story's I've ever ready I hope there is a follow up

Excellent Gift

You have a beautiful mind and an imagination that's based on how you believe people should treat each other. I love your world and the fact that you freely allow us to visit. When I first started reading your stories I quickly realized that they were not just entertaining but an actual experience. I'm actually transported by your words to a wonderful place. How do you thank someone for that. A number on a scale is so inadequate. You have a wonderful gift. I'm ready to open the next one. Thank you, Take Care

More than Excellent!

Well done!
One small error. Sam, calling his mother and being found, was seriously out of character considering his past and present mind. You could have come up with a more devious way for the family to be found.
Other than that, the story was compelling. You have a talent for story telling.

My Favorite

The story and telling of the story was excellent. I will look forward to reading more about Teegan and her family if you will write it. You skill could make you money I am sure you know. I am just happy to have stumbled into your world!!! Thank you very much!

beyond fantastic

I hope that a producer reads this and that the author makes millions off of the copy rights.... proofreading would be the only possible way to improve this fabulous story ...thanks Dreamcloud..

Wow. I've been hooked on your stories since I read The Promise. The Link is just amazing.

Reminiscent of Dean Koontz The Servants of Twilight

Both his and yours are excellent tales. 5* as usual. Anxiously awaiting The Link 2: Teegan.

Wow!

I just stayed up half the night reading this! I loved every minute of it. Reminded me slightly of the Twilight baby, with the contact and projecting feelings, but I love Twilight =D LOVE LOVE LOVE! I hope you've sent it to publishers (-like ALL of them, they can be foolishly picky and miss good stories)

Nice gesture

Thank you very much I love your stories and hate the wait, but the update you made yesterday on your bio gave me a little peace of mind and a reference. Now I know that I don’t have to come tomorrow looking for the second installment of “The Link”, but it tells me that it is coming along.
So, thank you.

Wow

Awesome story, was reading half the night