All Comments on 'The Game Ch. 02'

The story was good but you need to add more detail about how it felt inside your pussy. In your first story more detail on how big that black dick was.And how much you wanted to fuck that black monster.

A great story and a wonderful follow up to the first part. A really good premise that has the possibility of going anywhere your imagination wants to take us. Can't wait for part 3....

I really enjoyed your story... Most of it was completely believeable.

You have nailed this story... and you don't need to add more detail about how things feel. The build up and anticipation is much sexier than the plumbing of having sex.

I wish I could write half as well as you.

Excellent job... I am bookmarking your homepage and I NEVER do that.

I am having a hard time believing that you are a new author! I like the fact that you write your stories from a woman's point of view! Can't wait to read the next one!

Great to have 2 chicks on a guy and not have it be all about the guy!

Keep on writing. I'm looking forward to finding more of your stuff.

Absolutly cant wait for the next letter.

You dont need to add ANYTHING. this story was perfect. You are a wonderful author

Excellent story. Good pacing. While it's clear that your couple seems open to just about everything, jumping right to "I want to fuck a stripper" was rather fast for a first letter. Can they really make it all the way through to the end of the year?

A great story of a great fuck!

Tremendous story! Great sex-filled tryst!

I had to cum before the end but kept reading while I did the 'job'.

The best I have read to date.

The story just kept getting hotter and hotter, it made my cock throb for attention. I am definitely going to read the rest of the series.

I've read all your stories and you both are the best authors of erotic stories. They make my girl friend and me so hot that after reading your stories we have the best sex ever, and you give us great new ways to have the best sex ever.

How sexxxxxy......

I liked the story, the only thing I wish was different was the bitch whore slut aspect. It's just my personal preference not to refer to women with those labels. Everything else was great.

You're doing great. You're letting the story progress at a good clip. Your sex scenes are hot and don't trip into the didactic.

I wished I had the courage do to something like this for my husband.

really hot story thanks

looking forward to reading more

You asked for comments, so here is mine: Please keep writing. It's great.

I can't wait to read more. Awesome story and great, hot sex. -John

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Great first and second stories - I don't remember your description of Sara but she is a beautiful slender brunette in my mind and hot beyond belief. Thank for sharing your writing with us.

Great story. Can't wait to read the rest.

Not bad I must admit but you could use a few more details the banging till they cum is good and all but details make the writing world go 'round.

P.S: I only wrote because you asked me to

My only criticism is the spelling of trance, which is supposed to be the way I spelled it, not trans. Otherwise, you have a fantastic and exciting premise as a story plot, and the authorship is clear, concise, and very readably compelling. Sexy as sexy can be, although I can see where most of the casual readers want more graphic descriptions of the actual fuck scenes, as after all, part of the fun of reading these stories is getting inside of the authors dirty mind, ha, hah. All in all, though, an excellent job on your part. Don't let anyone's negative comments phase you in the least, because you have exactly what it takes! Cudos, and more cudos to you. Thanks for the fun.

I read a LOT of stories and this is absolutely fabulous!! Great writing. Great mixture of story line and really hot sex!

Great story! Love the way it started out in Ch 01 and has continued. Only thing that throws me is when the author switches from past tense to present tense - difficult to follow at times.

I love the story, but seriously, music on MTV? Come on now, music isn't played on MTV.

Very well written--you didn't miss the details that made this feel real. Very nicely done! I can't wait to read more.

Really great story.

Fantastic good descriptions and dialog. My shorts are going to be tenting for a long time. Oh and I bet a lot of us guys wished we had an open girlfriend/wife like you 😋