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Artiface of Strength Ch. 14

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by Anonymous

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by cliuin02/17/16

Thank you!

I love it your story and hope that will be a sequel .

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by Anonymous02/17/16

Love the story! But it's so unfinished :(

I love this story! You've left so much unfinished though. I hope you write the next chapters in these characters lives soon.
DJ

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by Anonymous02/17/16

Great story, thank you!

Thanks for sharing this wonderful story, it has been very entertaining and I have loved your characters.

Ending was a bit fast considering how long all your other chapters have been, but that is your prerogative as the author.

I would love to read a sequel to this story, again thanks for sharing.

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by jpz007ahren02/17/16

Lovely

Thanks Sis.

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by Anonymous02/17/16

Missing Chapter

Loved you writing and always gave 5 stars but really feels like there was a chapter missing between 13 & 14. Jumped from war footing to epilogue without any actual resolution of the main events. One example was the messages from Beth & John - were they actual messages? When did they pass them on? When did they get found? What was said / decided?

It just felt a bit rushed.

Other then that one issue really well written characters and I like the way it was put together.

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by Anonymous02/18/16

William's kids are intelligent and they have been taught well. If they have any gifts, they will be more powerful.

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by Anonymous02/20/16

Kudos

I agree with the comments previously, The jump at the end left me wanting for resolution but by far this was the best nonhuman story I've read here.

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by Anonymous04/19/16

More please

The problem with trying to encourage writers with 5 stars is that when something really well written comes along 5 stars don't do it justice. 'Nuf said. Where's your 1st novel available to read?

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by Ge5905/21/16

totally loved this story, very well written and a change from the normal genre. Outstanding, wish i could give it 10 stars. Just curious if there is going to be another chapter to this.

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by trinkrazo05/30/16

Thank you

This was such a pleasure to read. A unique take in a bloated genre where you dotted the i's and crossed the t's in a delightful manner. Can't wait for the next story from your talented brain.

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by Anonymous06/04/16

Aaaaaah yes! That's the stuff right there!

Thank you so much for such an excellent story!

Please keep writing!

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After a point this was the MOST

interesting and fun story I have read in a while...

I would love to see it developed further.... along the lines of the JazCullen, Jaisen and TaLtos6 stories. Lots of details, background, etc.... And side stories, a whole tapestry... on a Native Peoples' loom....

And I love the presentation of the Deity, both feminine and masculine, and her sense of humor, and her "side-kick", Ja-mul....

This has been fun

I also appreciate your editing, spelling, grammar and organizing... with just a touch here and there for cultural or historical accuracy!

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