That was beautiful - but how did they end up on a desert island?????
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Anonymous07/29/15
Stupid, irritating tense to write in
Writing in the third person present tense is an irritating and pretentious waste of time and space here; people want to have a story narrated, not laid out like stage directions. 2 stars, because it dropped my interest after the first paragraph, and reading through to the end didn't improve it.
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Anonymous07/29/15
Smart and clever story worth thwe read. Annony is so wrong about
all of these stories!! Gave it a 5 for your effort. And ANNONY eat it fuck bubble!
English
OMG Such beauty!!!
The content was perfect and the way it was written was magnificient!!!!
Island love
That was beautiful - but how did they end up on a desert island?????
Stupid, irritating tense to write in
Writing in the third person present tense is an irritating and pretentious waste of time and space here; people want to have a story narrated, not laid out like stage directions. 2 stars, because it dropped my interest after the first paragraph, and reading through to the end didn't improve it.
Smart and clever story worth thwe read. Annony is so wrong about
all of these stories!! Gave it a 5 for your effort. And ANNONY eat it fuck bubble!
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