One, Fifty or One Hundred 2.3

Not edited and done in about 3 hours.

This is not my best work, but I was bored. I will give you a refund if you want one.

You've been away too long.

For a three hour effort this shined brightly......Please finish it though . It's been a while since you submitted anything hopefully this got the juices flowing and we can look forward to another series of stories from you

That was fun!!

Good job. I liked his point-by-point, logical approach. I enjoyed reading it.
That's two alternate endings to swingerjoe's alternate ending (this one and one from an Anony in the comments to swingerjoe's).

I love the variations that people come up with . . .

Just one note . . . perhaps swingerjoe will comment . . . I doubt that he was 'upset' at all by the original. I think he just thought it would be fun (and an interesting change and perhaps a good challenge) to flip things around a bit, and he really succeeded !! The sheer number of responses (and downright vitriol in some cases) demonstrates how effective his writing was (and perhaps how upset some people can get if you mess with their preconceived notions and biases).

So, we've had three endings to the original, and two additional endings to one of those. The variations as I see it:

- Almost cheating spouse - Ahazura's ending and maybe Anony's alternate to swingerjoe's. (though in Anony's she also could have been just incredibly insensitive).

- Gullible spouse who looks pretty foolish in retrospect - FD45's alternate to swingerjoe's

- Slightly insensitive but otherwise okay spouse with gay friends and overly jealous husband - swingerjoe

- Insensitive, flawed, (but not evil) spouse with sensitive, flawed husband - stormbreyer.

Just my perspective . . . that's five. Three on the wife, one on the husband, one on both. Hope there are a few other surprises out there. Have there been others (perhaps amongst the comments) that i missed?

Thanks for this take FD45, thanks to swingerjoe for the setup for this take, and once again, thanks and great original setup story, Ahazura!!

somehow, someway this story that was decent but dispensible in my eyes , has aquired the classic cover-worthy status of " Louie, Louie "

So many worthy authors want to add their twist on this two chord wonder. To me , it all boils down both lies of commission and omission. Thanks to The Unoriginalist , I'm aware of the term ' gaslighting' as it pertains to a form of deception often referred to marriage infidelity forums. The issue is probably beyond fixing in husband and wife one on one dialogue.

That's exactly what the wife was doing but in all likelihood it will take marriage counseling on one level or another before any liar ( male or female ) will cop to it. . Speaking as a person who has multiple lawyers in family, the rhetoric and bombast will go toxic in quick hurry if unchallenged and not called out.

How did I like FD45's riff on this theme? I'll love it if this exercise inspires his inner muse to write,further classic stories like " I Stop Losing " or " Enabling " ( there are more but latter two are my personal favorites ) .

That gay thing was stupid when I read it. I like yours , Now 1 more chapter to end it

Fine but...

Way too much talk. Actions speak louder than words. How much cheating is enough cheating to tell you that it is not worth investing another minute of your time in a relationship with a selfish liar? No kids, easy decision. If he thinks the pain of heartbreak is bad now, can you imagine the pain of having his heart torn into pieces - one for the marriage and one for each kid that he has have to leave behind in a divorce? No, the woman described in this ongoing story is best described as a bitch. She is a horrible wife and will only get worse once she has hostages to torture him with. There is no need to over think this, no need for discussion, it is go time.

nice

SJ tried to M. Night Shyamalan the original story and came up short. Yours ties the two together. SO nice job.

We would all add our own wrinkle to a sequel.

Whenever you read a story your own preconceived notions prejudice the way you interpret it. SJ pushed his story one way by making Vicki a femme fatale now FD45 pushes back by declaring that Vicki is very happily married woman. Both are individuals assumptions from reading between the lines of the original story. Are they both valid assumptions? Of course. So why the fuss? I don't know but it's getting very boring.

Thank you, thank you, thank you

thank you, thank you!!!

UH-OH , now your gonna have the forgive it all crowd burning you in effigy !

Jeez FD45 , now you know that Foreskincaster, Luedon , Lex1 , and all the other "Swinger" crowd are currently busy making effigy's and voo doo dolls of you ! How dare you try to one up the almighty author who actually has the word Swinger in his title !!!!
Actually I could care less about the pleasures others take from a story (except for Foreskincaster ) because everyone has their own likes and "Squick's" .
But what I don't care for is the moral soapbox that these people sometimes feel the need to preach from after castigating everyone else who's opinion differs from their own. Just sayin'.
Overall, not bad for a couple of hours work.
4*'s
Cpprcrk

fun tale

fun to have you post

Nice Dialogue we have going here

Still dirty dancing in public would give a lot of people the wrong idea and add fixing herself up to the nines.....

Like the one from @Swingerjoe...

Like the one from @Swingerjoe this leaves a lot of issues open...The one from @Swingerjoe I understood it as a prank, but the question was: To whom? This one is more clear about what the "lover boy" intentions...However a good alternate ending to this story...3*

Thank you

This was a rework that worked still needs a ending through. SJ didn't try to do anything but piss off as many fans as he could because people are sick of his homo feeling. I mean who eats his wifes cream pie SJ. Does . SJ got his little feeling hurt over his fag story's and now he doesn't let people vote on his work boo hue !!!! He is one of the reason this site is going to shit .But fd45 came to blend the to toghter great job he was more interested in giving his fans a good read not piss off fans BIG difference !!!! Swingers get married so they can fuck around at party's singles can't get in. If open marriages are so great why does 82% end in breakup after 2to5years?? GREAT JOB FD45

A needed rebuttal, and much more believable.

But I never took SJ's version seriously; I thought it was and was supposed to be a joke. Same as his philosophy about marriage, a joke.

While interesting variations have been submitted...

No one yet seems to be tackling the remorse.

Ok, we have a problem.

So far, any ending to the original set-up has been focused on assigning blame.
(even in the original author's chapter 2)

Who is to blame? IS a logical starting point towards resolution, BUT......
So far, no one has tackled the REAL challenge here. And that is the remorse, the path to the future, and the work it takes to FIX the problem.

Sure, one page spin-offs don't afford any author of any capability the space to tackle such issues on a grander scale. However, that doesn't mean that it isn't an important component of this couple's total picture here in story form. So what we are missing, is really any sense of the epilogue. But even more-so in today's example, we don't even have ANY proposed solution.

After reading this, I feel that hubby is just as close to divorce as he is to reconciliation. I feel that wifey is sorry for the problems but still as smug as ever that she should have been afforded this ability to get "crazy (slutty-if you please)".

So FD45, after these few paragraphs, what has changed? Not much, except for hubby gaining some assurance that he wasn't overreacting.

Fair enough, but that alone isn't enough to make this a valuable contribution to the conversation. is it? I mean, just from reading the original set-up, the reader KNOWS that Hubby isn't over-reacting. It is WHAT HE CHOOSES TO DO WITH HIS NEW-FOUND KNOWLEDGE that provides the structure for a chapter two or add on .5.

You left us hanging by not providing that which this story needed the most:
The resolution.

Big Improvement

I am so glad that I'm not the only one that noticed the plot holes in S.J.'s alternate ending. I mean if he was really gay, then none of the information Vickie gave him made sense, like how he was one more sexual harassment suit from being fired, how he was known as a flirt among the women, and the fact that he insisted on meeting the married woman that he's been flirting with at every opportunity at a hotel instead of the restaurant like she originally suggested. Not to mention the last texts he sent her that kept talking about wanting to see her in a bikini and take a dip in the hot tub with him. Personally, I wasn't even sure that S.J. actually read the entire thing to completion. You obviously did.

I like the direction

Keep going, I would like to see where you take it.

Big Improvement

There were holes big enough to drive a truck through. Thanks for "fixing" the story as I liked the original and could not accept the alternative.

Liked your story more then his if only b/c he left out a bunch of admittedly small plot points. But when it's a 3 page story that stands out. Would love to see a 2nd chapter to this.

LOL!

I nearly spit my morning coffee across the room when I saw that this story was posted! Ahazura, you are a GENIUS! This may be the best thing that has ever happened to Literotica!

Let's tally this up so far: we have an original story, a second part by the author, an alternate second part by me, an alternate second part by another author, a third chapter to my alternate second chapter by FTDS, and now a third chapter to my alternate second chapter by FD45!

WOW!

I guess I'm now obligated to write a Chapter Four to this story! Will this saga of Bob and Sharon ever end? This is incredible!

I think I will write part 5

Let's see, change the names, change the plot, change the location, change everything.
That should help.
So far none of them were very good.

this is turning into a verbal tennis match

well played FD45, well played

Still unfinished

Let's git er done. When is someone going to finish the story!

Why?

Why did you think that alternate ending piece of crap needed continuation? 1*

Still more to come....

You got the story back on track from SJ's sidetrack, but it still needs a conclusion. The conflict is still unresolved and the characters deserve that completion.

THERE IS NO CLOSURE

only the possibility of satisfaction. TK U MLJ LV NV

Just stop, PLEASE

Will everyone please stop with the alternate endings, the story wasn't that good to begin with, but the alternate ending are even worst. Just put this story to rest, bury it under the title "CRAP" and lets move on to another story.

In this debate, Hell is still frozen over. 0.o

Yep, still in 100% agreement with FD. Go figure.

FD has done a great job of rebutting Joe's one-sided "feminist friendly" argument, using the evidence collected in Ahazura's Pt. 1 that Joe ignored. Wifey was angry that she got caught, and tried to turn the tables on Hubby, even going so far as to implicate her happily married best friend in a supposed plot to steal her husband.

Granted, Wifey had INTENDED to keep her vows at dinner, but she didn't count on a supposedly gay man actually being BISEXUAL. Also, as Ahazura pointed out in his original Pt. 2, Asshole could have had some date rape drugs on him to get her into bed anyway. The bisexual angle is a great twist that fits with both Ahazura's Pt. 1 AND Joe's alternate continuation. FD did an outstanding job of leveling the playing field, here.

As for Wifey's INTENTIONS, the road to a frozen hell, yada yada yada... You get the drift. lol

Also, there's a big difference between Jealousy and Territoriality. When a wife gets hit on by another man and the persistent asshole won't back off, it's the husband's job to protect his territory, e.g. DEFENDING his wife and marriage from the interloper. Same thing goes if the situation is reversed. I'd like to read one where Hubby is the one getting hit on by a supposedly lesbian woman and Wifey finds out about it. That would be interesting, IMO.

Personally, I'm not even going to throw my hat into the ring or try to write my own ending. I was satisfied with Ahazura's original ending, but reading these alternates is entertaining. Besides, I have too many other projects in the works right now. :)

5 Solid Stars

Lots to cover

First, thank you for the kind words, Irondragon. I appreciate them.

Second, SJ has a very valid point. So many LW writers write lazy, loony, lamebrained ladies. Women cheat. Women cheat for reasons. (not necessarily GOOD reasons, but reasons). There are slick talkers out there and otherwise good people can get bamboozled. So I really liked his 'turn about' story where the wife both had a brain and a spine. THAT part or the gay part, I did not mind.

My issues were for the huge numbers of things he left to the way side to force write the husband as wrong. That is not cricket! If you are going to use the story, use the story.

I really don't see any need to finish the damned story. Their marriage is on the rocks. She was a bit selfish and short sighted but overall is not a bad woman. One hopes she has a good cookbook because she has a lot of crow to eat and it is not a very digestible fowl. BUT, they WILL likely make it through.

I appreciate all the comments. No, the original wasn't very good, in that it force wrote the wife as artificially wrong as SJ did in writing the husband. But I thought the 'gay' twist was nicely done AND had room for a retwist.

No, the story is NOT resolved.

The only thing I don't understand is 1 bombing. Is this an offense against the English language? Does it make you feel dirty and sorry that you read it? Is it an offense against everything that is good and decent, with writing bordering on the incomprehensible?

Such a story deserves a one. This is not a story like that. Indeed, most stories here don't deserve a one. Even if it is your anti-squick (nice word)

Thanks for the comments. I have three stories in the pipeline (one nonconsensual, one LW and one humorous LW) but I haven't been motivated to finish the damn story.

Maybe I will give it a try.

One thing FD45 forgot

What about the incriminating texts between Vicki and Bob in SJ's chapter? That was the smoking gun that proved there was something going on between those two.

you don't do it often but you do it right

I saw the title and said, "Fuck, not another one." Then I saw that you wrote it and I read it. Nice restoration of balance using the FACTS laid out in the original. My only wish would have been a bit more aftermath. Using the original and yours,have to completely ignore sj's ham-handed, (Is ham handed applicable to a feminine approach?) approach that ignored the original, I don't buy she thought the guy was gay. I think she fully intended to cheat. Maybe therapy will save this marriage, maybe I'll pen an alternate version...probably not in both cases.

Good job on this, especially for the time you spent. I'm lucky to get a paragraph in that length of time.

Hey FD45 - It's Good to See You Back in the Saddle!

I liked your rebuttal of SJ and it cleared up several elements to his story. While this isn't a "home-run" for me, it is still a good follow up. I sincerely hope you continue writing, I've always enjoyed the tales you share!
Thanks again and please keep writing.

"File a harassment complaint?"

For dancing?

Bob is even more of a jealous control freak than he was portrayed in SJ's version!

@harassment anon

Lovertool was hitting on her at work. THAT is cause for sexual harassment charges.

@SaxonHart

"Hitting on her" according to who? Vicki, who was trying to drive a wedge between Sharon and Bob? Last I checked, having a lunchtime conversation doesn't fit the description of "harassment."

Suspension of disbelief

This story was even less plausible than Joe's alternate ending. To believe this version you have to believe that Vicki's account of what happened at work and at the bar are completely accurate -- which is something FD45 failed to portray. Why should Bob believe Vicki over his own wife?

We also have to believe that a gay man is actually bisexual, and that neither Sharon nor (presumably) his boyfriend knew about it. Ridiculous.

At least Joe's ending had an original twist. What was the twist to this version? The wife is a cheating liar? How many times do we need to read that plot before it gets old?

This worked better

as it combined all three segments.

You did a good job.

Original wasn't bad. Love that the husband wasn't a cum slurping fag

SJs bullshit was his typical closet gay tripe, the alternative ending didn't improve the original This restored a little balance. Saxon_Hart nailed it. They should file sexual harassment charges. Anytime a person in a position of authority propositions a subordinate it's sexual harassment. It's the law, fools. Haven't you ever been to one of those meetings?

Much Better

I liked how hubby focused on the emails that Sharon wrote. You did miss the email messages about a hot tub. How does she explain that? Really glad to have you back writing again. Your alternate endings are so much more interesting and realistic than some other writers who go for the gore--not billionaire Al, by the way. Also, I am sad that although Literotica says there are 39 other comments, I can only find about a dozen.

OMG! Stop with the worthless continuations!

Authors start with an idea and flesh it out in their stories. To try and finish their stories is neigh on impossible because you can't read the authors mind. So any continuation is the view point of the new author. Some will love it, some will hate it. In this case I didn't particularly care for it because, once again, there is no conclusion. Did he divorce her? Did they resolve her attitudes? Does she file a lawsuit? Unfinished doesn't work for me.
1 star.

Excellent take given the original story

I have to say this is one of the better re-imaginings of a story I've read in quite some time. It kept faith with the original and expanded on it in interesting ways. Kudos to you and I hope you take up the proverbial pen more often in the future.

STOP!!!

Another alternate ending story with NO END!!!!

Excellent

for a continuation of another writers story. Your characters and evidence were much closer to the original than SJ. His were really a different story altogether. I would not have even allowed the inclusion of the predator being bi. Let the original evidence speak for itself. I actually saw this kind of situation happen at a business near me. The gal was tricked enough that she allowed herself to get so drunk that she was semi comatose and raped. Guy is in prison but the marriage did not last. She had been warned however. Thanks for the read.

Interesting

Not bad, however, this sequel definitely needs to be continued.

So....

keep going! You fix a lot of SJ's mistakes; you've surely thought about where they go from here; tell us!

Why are people so obsessed with this one story? The original wasn't that interesting, Joe's sequel was a funny bit of trolling, but even that didn't need continuation. Let this one die.

OH NO! FUCKLAMEBASTARD IS BAAAAACKKKKK!!!!!!!!

HEY FUCKLAMEBASTARD! JUST GO AWAY! WE DONT NEED YOUR OPINION ASSHAT!

This was an ending?

Seriously?

Please, no more continuations.

I think the Swinger Joe immortalized this story more than it was worth when he wrote his controversial chapter. This story was entertaining to begin with (chapter one) but eveyhing else subsequent has been one disappointing ending after another. The reason why none of the endings work is because this was supposed to be a straight forward BTB story. No further thought was supposed to be given to this tale.

Swinger Joe has an imagination that is outside of the box. It makes him very gifted, but when he put it to this story it messed with the laws of LW nature. Now this story is a fucking vampire that won't die.

Let's drive a stake through this thing's heart and move on.