All Comments on 'The Closet'

You surely have a knack for erotic imagination. I noted a couple minor grammar errors that are just a bit distracting but the story was so good it was not a serious bother. I would love to be your editor....and more. I will be watching for your next story. Hopefully you will "hook up" with a really great, experienced, older lover that can make any machine look like a poor substitute for the experience of a mature man.

Excellent first story. Minor grammar and spelling issues, nothing that can't be fixed by carefully reading your story before pressing submit. This works well as a stand alone, but I'd love to see it continue as well. Keep up the good work!

Wonderful story with just enough background to set it up and enough action to keep it hot. A very good first effort deserving of a sequel. The title is a subtle double entendre and hints at more to come.

Having lived in Boca for 10 years it brought back a lot of fond memories. Unfortunately, I didn't get a welcome visit from a hottie when I first moved there.

"... couldn't take no more".

Just don't read this story on a public bus. Your panties will be soaked by the time you get to your destination.

Wow. That was hot. Really enjoyed. You should definitely continue her adverture in the big city.

For first time writing, you out scored big. Very hot. Getting ready to read your second story. Hope to see much more from you. Keep up the good work.

SB

The story can't seem to decide the hair color of the main character.

The grammatical errors were easy to figure out & didn't detract from this excellently crafted story, deslite the whining of the other nitpickers. You have enviable talent & after reading both stories, I'm eager for more. 5 well deserved stars. Oh, & thanks for soundly thrilling my pussy & the incredible orgasms. I think I'll now go back for second helpings.

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Oh Em!

You turn me on beyond belief! Let's go find a Sybian and ride together in a warm spring rain.

XOXO,

Becca

That was sexy, I liked it a lot

Oh my god. That was amazing. My cunt is so wet right now and my nipples are so hard it's almost painful. Please continue with this storyline

OMG loved his story got me so excited and Deb I would love to try one of those Sharon‘s amazing😘🥰