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Typical!!
Nothing but a mindless fuck fest - no real story line at all.
Also shows he has no respect for his sister whatsoever.
Wow trash
I don't care about the respect but storyline not even there it feels like I missed the first maybe even second chapter
5
good story and effort
Well we have no respect for you asshole of LIT dear annony!!
but you just keep writing comments and sounding like the old useless fag you are. gave this story a 5
Shit Story
There is usually a trick to the bet as the Brother tries to get his Sister to agree to it.
Then the brother gets to pop her virgin cunt, or something like that.
Freedom or voice
Everyone is allowed their opinion. I tried a different style this time. It may not be a very good style. Oh well. I am learning and trying. At least I am brave enough to put my name out there and don't hide behind Anonymous. Please keep reading and leaving comments. I like the feedback.
Too quick
You didnt seem to invest much in the character and causing an erotic situation can be as much if not more of a turn on than a simple bang bang. If you want to go that route add a little more characterization...make them more memorable than dick size.
Distasteful and wrong
He obviously has no respect or liking for his sister, to feed her to a bunch of nameless dicks just because he can; guys are supposed to protect their sisters, or at least keep watch for the obvious dickheads around her, but her prick of a brother deliberately feeds her to entire team and lets that bunch of dicks use and abuse her, probably because he's a complete sack of shit himself. This story has no redeeming features, just another guy making his kid sister into his buddies' whore because he thinks it would be fun. 1 star for having the nerve to post this garbage.
Terrible
Way too fast and no character development. There is no issue with a gang bang but you did nothing to develop your story. Total shit.
Even though now enough character, it's great to imagine while masturbating
Just saying.
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