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UMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM!!!!!
Well done...very well done!!!!!!!!
More, please
LOTS more!!!
Beautiful
A wonderful lovestory. So well told.
Almost Sad It's Done
I enjoyed Ch. 01 a lot and looked forward to Ch. 02. I liked this chapter but wish you'd stretched it out a little more - still gave it 5 stars!
5 Stars
You've developed the characters nicely.
the best I've read in here, or just about anywhere else!!
The best! Here, there, anywhere!!!
Loving it
I hope this isn't the end. It can be a long and complex novel.
Carry on the mood
Please carry on with the mood. I loved your Princess. Started The Circle and was liking it until it incorporated too much incest for my tolerance. Had to discontinue. Hopefully this one will not follow that route.
Beyond WOW
This is beyond anything my wife reads from the grocery store book racks - a treasure of a romance. You have created a category beyond anything Literotica readers are used to reading. This old Fart can't get enough of it, and you - the person at the keyboard. The human emotion and depth of character are definitely professional quality. I'm honored to be acquainted with this script ... and you.
Altogether writerly
with an sweetly crafted build up, generous character development and a satisfied sexual evolution...Happily anticipating the next chapters.
Still, i winced when you used the word "smirk" with it's derogatory connotation.
"Smirk" Grinded" and "Thrusted" are the 3 literotica usage sins that rankle me so very badly, that i sorta wish i'd paid attention in English class 60 odd years ago, and could feel legitimately offended.
( insert self-directed "smirk" here.)
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