Three Square Meals Ch. 24

Another success!

That's a hell of a learning curve, to get your ass almost beaten up in order to learn (new armor tech, abilities..), but learning and growing is the key for a good story.
As for the near future, beside the obvious - John learning to control his power (aka the hulk), Dana improving tech (armor, ship, AI please) as they are getting into contact with the Greys I would like to see Alyssa learning about her psychic ability from them.
Maybe start projecting also = Jean Grey / Phoenix??

Adventure . .

. . compassion, romance, invention, exploration, character development, good dialog, what did I miss?

Thank you!

Thank you for another excellent chapter.
All characters becoming aware of their own and eachother's capabilities will undoubtedly enhance each character's further development.
Can't wait to find out what sharing Drakkar technology with the Ashanath may bring them, in technology, knowledge and personal development of abilities...

I love this story but that was a long wait for what was basically a recap of last chapter

Boring and dull are some of the words that come to mind when I read this chapter, again no continuation of the storyline what so ever. In future if your going to do a chapter that is only sex then please say for example that the following chapter in no way continues the storyline and can essentially be seen as a filler chapter

Contact

I have been reading since you popped out the first chapter. I must say, it's an awesome series and I'm loving the way it's going! If someone has ideas that they would like to throw at you, how they get in contact to pitch said ideas?

Good stuff

But after the previous chapters little scrap, they really need a Doctor. Someone that can hold them alive until john can fix them, perhaps a new girl or It being jades job..

Hello again
IMHO - much to much sex - no story :-( . A little boring this chapter.
But its your story - I really like it - and I really wait for the next chapter.
Bye
Harald

Very good

While I agree that this did not really push the plot this chapter, it did set it up to really expand later, showing new tech, and how the crew is handling new abilities. Also, sometimes sex chapters are just what you need. This is a sex lit. site after all. Keep it up and write how you want. We all love it.

"All characters becoming aware of their own and eachother's capabilities will undoubtedly enhance each character's further development."

I've read lots of books where something significant happened and the various people in the group didn't bother to tell each other about it for ages and its just left hanging there, unresolved.

Calara, Dana and Jade aren't around John much during combat, so they aren't likely to get an opportunity to see him smashing stuff up unless I come up with something contrived. Reviewing the camera footage seemed like a good way of killing two birds with one stone, as well as letting John see himself in action when he blacked out.

I'm sorry some people didn't like this chapter, but in my opinion it was a good way of resolving the three points above in one fell swoop!

"I love this story but that was a long wait for what was basically a recap of last chapter"

I'm typically churning out about chapter and half a week. I think I've been spoiling you if you consider that a long wait!

"If someone has ideas that they would like to throw at you, how they get in contact to pitch said ideas?"

Firstly I'm glad you're really enjoying the story. Same to everyone else for the kind comments below. My email address is in the Tefler author profile, just click on contact and add your email address and I'll respond.

I've had a bunch of emails and I've read them all, some of which have had some really great suggestions. Hopefully you will have seen some of your ideas being incorporated into the story so far. Jade started out as a blue skinned alien called Opal, but someone requested a green alien girl instead, so I rewrote the character when looking up precious stones/gems to base it on and found an awesome image of a Tiger made out of Jade. The character kind of wrote itself at that point. :)

There's been a few requests for a Doctor/scientist and I hear your pleas, one is on her way!

I've seen a few comments about too much sex, but as someone mentioned, this site is about erotic literature after all! I try to get a decent balance of space battles, ground battles, world building, character building and romance in there too but the girls are pretty much going to get a good going over at least once a chapter. ;)

Anyway, the next chapter is all about the plot, world building and character development, so hopefully you will enjoy that. I'm about 75% through it at the moment, so it will probably be up on the site early next week.

Sugestions

Somebody suggested to add an IA to the ship for raising the shields, but it's not really necessary. It's been established that the ship got a lot of automations on the last refit, and there is some kind of computer managing things, so you just need to set up those automations. Whether to add an AI or not depends on whether it fits with the story you have in mind or not.

You get suggestions, but this is YOUR story, so you should think and use or adapt them IF you like them, but don't feel obligated to please everybody everytime.

Suggestions

I would suggest energy absorbing shields instead of deflecting that would charge a weapons array to fire back in a continuous beam at the foe, in effect an automatic defence mechanism that would return fire until the crew were in position to attack

No rest for the wicked!

Am I the only one that has sympathy for John and the girls?

Two girls are wounded.
They have had a lot of dramatic surprises, and even traumatic scares.
They are dealing with the biggest crisis in their relationship to top off all of that.

Lol! I know I would want to rest and get some.

This is basically giving them a reset. I know that makes this chapter refractory as far as the action goes but I do read this for the sex too.
Sex is developing into something much more nuanced as the story develops and it is a humanizing look at the characters. It is absolutely part of the story. I think there is some tendency to see the sex as fan service and irrelevant to the story.

The "rough" session with Dana was a key to provoking her insight into the personality changes, which nearly caused a meltdown. They really didn't take a hard look at how bad that ability to change personalities could be.

The sex in this chapter was a bonding and a healing experience. Literally in the case of the girls that Jade nursed. The group has reset and the sex is part of how they process that. It is also a celebration of survival.

Even the ship is taking a rest as the Ashana are towing it in.

I almost think you are asking for a longer wait so that low action chapters can be combined until action happens or at least a cliff hanger.

For me the visit to Ashana is a cliff hanger.

Five+

Five stars plus for this story it can only get better if the chapters are longer so theres more to read.

I finished this all in one day!

A testament to your story writing. I love the series and happy you've been quick to write it. I'm so into the as Sci-Fi that the sex surprises me. I don't mind - it is an erotic story after all!

In reply to "I finished this all in one day!"

I'm thinking that it might be a good idea for me to go back and expand and extend the first three chapters, to flesh them out a bit and make the story more engaging.

Those stories were the first I'd ever written, so I'm sure I could improve on them with another look. I think chapter 2 and 3 in particular are very short and almost 100% sex scenes. I'm sure I must lose some people who find all that initial sex a bit relentless.

Let me know what you guys think.

Oh and I've finished Chapter 25. Coincidentally its 25% longer than any previous chapters I've written as a lot of stuff happens.

I'm making some good progress on Chapter 26 too!

Mysterious

Great stuff, can't for next one

Recording

Thank you for another wonderful Ch. I think though that they should erase the recording ASAP or at least down load it to something they can hide & then erase the record of the attack & their actions . If a "Government" or some group saw what John & Jade can do they would be very interested in capturing & "examining" their powers & abilities much to their discomfort & freedom.