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All I Want for Christmas... Ch. 01

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by nightshadow03/02/16

Shows promise...

Keep on writing this. It shows promise and good character development. The setup is decent. Only a few very minor typos, nothing jarring. Nice work overall. Didn't jump right out and grab me yet, though- I don't feel invested in the characters just yet, so hopefully Chapter 2 is where you set the hook.

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by Aries046003/02/16

Keep on

...writing. The characters are developing slowly but it's a nice beginning and I hope to read more of it.

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by Anonymous04/05/16

What's next?!

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by petercumming6905/19/16

Nice n slow...

The story is Nice and slow in movement...I like that. Very promising continuation setting...bring On some more.

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