Sex, Drugs, and an Unexpected Threesome

UNCERTAIN OF YOUR TIME SEQUENCING

As I read along I initially thought this was a past tense telling of something that happened and suddenly it became real time as if you were relating it as it was happening.

3 Star

Loved it

Loved a realistic and hot encounter

"95lbs with 28H breasts" First of all, it's "ninety-five", not "95". Those sized breasts on such a tiny person would be hanging down to her knees.
"she told me about a time her and Carolyn " Bad grammar. Should be "she and Carolyn."
""don't you think girl's bodies are so sexy?" The first letter in dialogue must be capitalized.I notice you rarely do that.
"Adderall" is a proper name so should be capitalized.
" Carolyn says "I'll be right back" and walks into the bedroom and closes the door." You must put a comma after dialogue - "I'll be right back,"

I suggest an editor.

Notice how the grammar cops are always Anonymous? Chicken shits. I thought it was a great story, got me off and that's what this is about right?
Good stuff keep it up!