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Over the top
I used to love this series. But now it goes over the top in unrealism. And incest is nothing to take this lightly.
5 stars
Keep up the great story . Can't wait for the next chapter
Great story...
A little feedback on a great story...hated the unfaithful storyline. It really took away from the premise of mutual commitment, even in an unconventional relationship.
Poor choice on using the names Abby and Anna. It was a little confusing at first, but in the latest chapter it began to confuse you too. Jean is Abby's mom, not Anna's.
Really enjoying the story otherwise....
Way out of line
It was going so well until the fourth chapter, but then it became unrealistic, untasteful, and lost any theme it had. Huge disappointment.
interesting direction
Thank you very much for sharing your story. I think your writing is excellent and from what I can see you have a great editor.
I really enjoyed the first three chapters. I respect your right and decision to add the unfaithful aspect of the story line. It wasn't my personal favorite but I am admittedly a romantic. I like my love stories to be simple and easy. I do think you handled it well however. The drifting into expanding so many people is a bit off putting to me. I feel that adding so many partners is diluting the love/experience that the original three have. I feel it is drifting into more stroke story waters. Not that there is anything wrong with that. It is just that for me personally I like your characters and would hate to see their sense of uniqueness buried under too much flesh.
These are just some thoughts I have and I cannot stress enough how much I appreciate your ideas and ability.
Thanks again for sharing your works,
Ahaz
I hope this great story will be continued
I dont understand the detractors here.... Great story, love the emotional connection between everyone
Since Chap.4, garbage.
4 it hit rock bottom and 5 it began digging. Now, you've reached the Earth's core. Tracy (Sean's wife) sent him to the set to make love to Anna?? WTF?? What about Anna's partners?? What a stone bitch. "Oh, it's OK with me so Who gives a crap what her partners think!" What an ass. That whole theme and the unbelievable way the characters and "Jean" deal with it ruined this story. This chapter is so unreadable I think you should just stop the bleeding and delete 4 on and make this a 3 part series.
-Jahoo-
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