All Comments on 'Cum N Go'

the rhyme felt a bit forced. Working with rhyming couplets is tough, you might want to work a less restrictive rhyme scheme to help the poem flow a bit more naturally. You might want to make a correction to your third to last line: "there" wants to be "their". The audio was excellent and added to the poem. Overall, very good.

jim :)

I would love to read all your work. Then again, I would love to hear you read me all your work. Its great.

No rose colored glasses here in looking at people.

i dont know how erotic that was, but I liked it alot!