Slices Of Small Town Life

Well Written

Well written, easy to read, but I have seen the set up many times before. Although there is only so much variation possible in human nature I hope this has a more interesting conclusion.

Finally !

Just when it looked like I was going to have to find another hobby , QHML1 shows up like the cavalry in an old western . This is starting out like a LW series should , without caveats from an anal retentive author who is only interested in having praises heaped upon their over inflated ego's by a bunch of yesmen who share in their depraved views of marriage.
Q , thank you so very much for returning a hint of sanity back to this genre ! I have a feeling we're all going to very much enjoy the ride !
5*'s
Cpprcrk

Great Appetizer

My interest is piqued. Can't wait for more.

Winterfrog schtick transposed to Americana

Nothing original per se to be found here, but this is fairly entertaining as an exercise in vamping and improvising with Loving Wives cliches. Winterfrog excels in creating stories about arrogant wives who have gotten away with so much , for so long that they believe even when finally caught out by very mongamy-minded husbands that they can renegotiate a new regime with explanation of how extramarital activity is non-threat to marriage and that hubby should be secure in knowledge that he is her 'one true love'.

That bit of sophistry rarely plays well to majority of Loving Wives fans and the fictional wronged husbands. When we see YouTube video of feckless driver on mountain road crossing double yellow line with blind curve approaching , the outcome is unlikely to end without debris being ejected helter skelter. qhml1 has established the character essentials of each half of married couple and their diametrically opposing paradigms of fidelity .

The outcome is prefated and predetermined . But the countdown to collision has officially begun. The only question is when, where and the certainty I'll be there for the BOOM based on this author's sterling resume of stories.

A good beginning as expected...

A good beginning as expected...As @qhml1 says it will be a series of interconnected stories...In this part this woman being with her husband for 30 years didn't know him at all...She even didn't loved him...Let's see where @qhml1 will take us...3* for now

this one needed an editor

In the past, I've REALLY e4njoyed qhml1's stories, but this one really needed an editor (incorrect verb tense, missing pronouns, etc.). It's a disappointing compared to what I've grown to expect.

3*s

I was disappointed with the story. Not the emotional roller coaster qhml1 is famous for creating.
Well, I'll award this 3*s. It is the opening chapter of a series, out of respect for qhml1 his body of work, I will wait for the series to be completed. Then read it and comment.
Thank you for the good start.


AMerryman

Obviously the cliff hanger...try not to wait to long,

sorry i just dont care for adulterers

2* she is a long term cheater, he needs to dump and ruin her, or compost her

I suspect, and hope,

that the sum of the parts is greater than the individual stories. This story, by itself, was unremarkable, but Q is working on an interesting concept here. Let's see how it all turns out.

strange story

seems to me me to be a strange story so far. she has it all and still wants more? now how stupid can a person get to go that far just for a few nights of fun. but more interesting is the fact that she owns her own business and now it seems like she might have to pay a pretty price for her fun on the side. hope to see the next chapters soon.

HDK took the words right out of my mouth. An interesting concept. I would've preferred more backstory assuming each chapter average two or three pages and one hell of a finale. But I'm sure with qhml1 being the great author he is, the sizzle will have us salivating for the steak by the time the finale is presented.

Another story where the husband is perfect and the wife

Is a stupid cheater.

It's been done to death.

Very weak compared to your others

Really not a lot here to rate against. It was like watching a trailer for an upcoming movie while you are waiting for the main feature. If you don't give us readers enough to eat in each instalment we will by default cook ourselves our own ending. Better luck in the next instalment.

Not Up To Your Usual Standards

"Bobby said she was good with it.” – A couple of things puzzle me – she’s obviously been cheating with Bobby, and NEVER thought that his angry demeanor was aimed at her? And what does it matter whether AMANDA is good with it? She HAD to know Charley wouldn’t be good with it! And how can a presumably intelligent woman not know that a guy will tell her ANYTHING he thinks she needs/wants to hear to get in her pants?

“Then she realized he may never play with them again, and tears welled” – Again, a wife who cheats, then is upset that her husband is angry and will probably leave her!

Given her penchant for “playing”, why would Amanda’s feelings matter?

“Yes, she thought, she did want to stay married to Charley” – Um, what does what SHE wants matter? She better hope that’s what CHARLEY wants!

This is a set up to other chapters but I feel as well it should be , he will walk away from her . I'm sure he would've wanted to fuck some 23 year old hot stripper with a beautiful young tight body but he was married and stayed loyal. Only selfish self centered people will cheat and risk it all when they have a good marriage. If the sex was falling off it is because she was fucking way more than he was because she was doing it for nine or so years. She should've put her businesses up for sale and tried to get him to work less so they could enjoy each other. Instead she chose a path that will now destroy her life as she knows it and rightfully so

I hope ensuing stories are more entwined than disjointed; and the author resolves the plot he's laid down in this chapter along with forthcoming plots separately but completely. Since the author is qhml1, I am fairly confident he will deliver another gem.

Toys?

"they were just toys, to play with until she could get home to him." - Does this mean that if he doesn't throw her cheating cunt out, that she intends to continue "playing" with her "toys" until she gets home?

not that good

soul mate? fool bitch has some serious head problems. waiting for more. 3*

As a first chapter, this provides a decent introduction and setup, but I'm not feeling all that compelled to read any further. Rose is just another serial cheater with no self control, and Charlie is just another loyal, hard-working victim of said cheater. At least, so far. Maybe there is more depth to these characters that hasn't been revealed yet. Given the author's reputation, I'm assuming that is the case.

One major pet peeve: the word is "drivel" -- not "dribble."

2☆

No passion or excitement.

OK

This is an ok setup, but not remotely on your usual level. Almost everything here is expositioned detail, with next to nothing happening organically in front of our eyes. There's barely any dialog in the whole thing. I would argue that we get to SEE more of the housekeeper's personality than we do the husband's, whose character is largely just TOLD by someone else.

Assuming this is a setup for more, it serves as a great example of why it's rarely effective to open with the cheater's POV (there are exceptions). If this chapter had been from HIS perspective, it would have opened with marital bliss, gone through a bizarre and alarming conversation with the other man's wife, moved through uncertainty and pain, and ended with a confrontation but also a lot of remaining questions.

Done THIS way, it invites us into every last secret and every tiny detail that might otherwise have served an effectively unfolding journey. We know everything about the betrayal...no questions left to care about...but we know next to nothing about the betrayed. Certainly we don't know him enough to be upset for him, or to be anxious about his future. Instead, we have ancillary irrelevancies like how many stores he owns and what his general standing in the community is.

8 years?!

She cheated on him for 8 years!?!
There's no coming back from that.
Burn the bitch.
Good introduction.

The first chapter

Removes any doubts as to the outcome... Yop could skip to the last chapter or you could have just included the divorce in the btb paragraphs of this one saving you and us the wait for the inevitable.

I always look forward to your submissions to this site. That's all for now.

Now annony is a fucking mind reader, when we all ko whe has no brain !!!!

He tells everyone he and we know the ending of this story. God the fucking fag is such an asshole!! Hey asshole of LIT , how about you write something and let us read it. Na that's to smart. The ugly old fag would rather just bitch and cry about others. gave this a 5

5

for a good LE story and effort.

Dreary

Nothing erotic about this depressing slice of life.

Drop it and start a better storyline.

Your stories are always written well.

I think that you've set this one up nicely to lead to the followups. As to the typical critics, on the one hand we have the willing cuckold lovers, and on the other we have the burn every bitch and her lover. As for me I look for a good story, and although the content often means that I either finish it or I don't depending on how extreme it is. If it's well written, as most of yours are, I do finish it and applaud the effort.

The cunt was cheating for 8 fucking years, time to burn the bitch down. Will wait to rate.

well done

It great writing to make one feel a bit for her, hate what shes done at the same time.

Its a sad tale.
I see this written a lot but I dont understand how they could love someone and do a long term period of cheating.
Sure a one time drunken mistake like her first one she still loved him, but repeatedly?

Nothing

in this story yet to deserve a high score. Hope it gets better in the next chapter. 1*

Great start

# 5

A lot more spelling and word choice mistakes that I would expect from your writing. (Almost as many as bt did in her(?) comments). Nothing about Rose is appealing and I'm not sure I will continue reading if she is the standard example of this town. The fact he left without any legal recourse leads me (and apparently Rose as well) to believe that there is a possibility of reconciliation. Perhaps since he doesn't know the depth of the betrayal yet it could be a possibility but her arrogance about winning him back almost made me laugh out loud.

Great LW story!!!

Gave you a 5!!!

Too early to score

I reserve comment until I see more. I assume Bobby and Amy are the next chapter?

JimC

I always get a kick out readers

who read between the lines and can predict the authors intend. Chuckle.
This author is one of the better LW writers. Many of his stories made the LW "hall of fame" and I can see why. Always enjoy anything this author writes. Compared to most of the stories posted in this category there is really no contest.
Bonny/Vasty this is one time I have to agree with your score. You do hit it right once in a while. Just a little sarcasm girl, lighten up please, just toying with you. Thanks author for a good start of a story. Awaiting your next one. 5* (ML)

5 because dear annony gave his standard dumbass 1.

It's first a good LW story, and second I have to give it my standard 5! Eat shit annony, you fucking fag!!

I have no idea what to rate this one

You're not really kind on cheaters, or so I've noticed, in your stories, so I'm not gonna jump the gun and say "1 star!!1!" here.

Anyway, this is one first class delusion, in that she thinks she has a choice about whether *she* stays with Charlie, as opposed to him ever staying with her.

I mean, shit, this isn't a one time thing. 8 years of affairs. And he's going to find out. And it's going to be ugly. How the hell does anyone think they can actually save their marriage from that kind of shit? 8 years of fucking around on her husband.

A cheating wife for 8 years...

...doesn't deserve any break. BTB. Charley is better off without her.

Unreality

"Yes, she thought, she did want to stay married to Charley. He was her soulmate, the man she wanted to see holding her on her death bed. Life without him wasn't appealing. She needed to get him to understand none were ever a threat to us, they were just toys, to play with until she could get home to him."

Do women really think that way? "it was just meaningless sex, honey. It's you I love". As if that, "love", matters to most guys. As if love was more important than sex. Most men would love to have lots of meaningless sex with every good looking woman that crosses their path. Why can't wives understand it's just sex and we really love our wives? That's what makes stories like this unreal. Reality is it's men that think this way, not most women. The emotional side of the relationship is what is important to most women. To be sure there are plenty of sluts that are just as promiscuous as men. From a strictky biological pov it's a in a man's interest to impregnate as many females as possible. Once a woman is pregnant she's done for 9 months. In that time a man can impregnate a couple dozen women. Harems make sense.

So how does Rose try to justify her cheating? Just how can she explain it to Charlie? Is she delusional that he'd accept her cheating? Why did she do it? She thought she'd get away with it? Never get caught? She's a sex addict? What Charlie didn't know wouldn't hurt him - until he got an STD from her? If Charlie is banging sexy 25 year old hot blond, who's tits don't need a little fixing... How would she feel? That wouldn't be a threat to her or there marriage would it? It's just sex not love.

So where's the story go? RAAC, WACC or BTB? They've all been done before. What happens with the prenup? Frankly getting married these days is a terrible deal for men. Adultery needs to be a crime and the divorce laws changed so a cheater gets nothing.

How in Hell ...?

How can a Q story have a current rating below 4? Well, perhaps because some readers grade on how they like what the characters do! Actually, change that to 'grade the characters based on whether those characters act in a way the raters think they themselves woulda acted,' (except those raters really wouldna!)

Except for a few, kinda trivial, mistypes ... this is a finely crafted story which also sets up what the author promised for 4 or 5 more tales in this setting and with the players introduced to date!

5* but don't let me down, Q!

Even more despicable

She says that their daughter had just graduated college, making her about 22 (this is consistent with time line that she reconnected with Charley about 2 years after their own college and married a year and a half after that). So she started her affairs when her only child was about 14. The child that they made "sure she grew in to a sensible, responsible adult." How would that have gone if it blew up when she started, when her daughter was in 9th grade? Cause being a high school girl in a small town if your mother is exposed as a cheater couldn't be harmful at all, could it?

I am sure that qhml1 will make this story more nuanced, but at the moment I consider Rose to be completely beneath contempt.

Always love your stuff. Will be waiting for the next installment.

Too soon to grade this one

I am a Q fan, so am happy to see a new series. Rose's character - yuck - wouldn't want this woman for a friend or wife for sure. Q doesn't usually do RAAC stories, so hopefully hubby can move on.

Good opening

The playing field is set. Now to see what develops. Nice work, as expected.

Not this time, for a great writer this one was boring

You never got into the characters to made this appealing. It read like a eulogy. Not your normal writing.

I don't why go forward.

He said if true they were done. Well, it's true.

Not a boring start, rather creation of a plausible compelling storyline

I can't wait for the continuation of this story. Very well laid background which can lead the author in a number of different directions, all, at this point interesting. Thanks. xoxoxoxo Annette

This is an obituary

It reads like it was written by a mortician. All the excitement of dried flowers, moldering on a grave. Not at all surprised this isn't scoring well. qhml1 has written a few subpar stories in a row now. Might be time to sit back and polish the trophies.