The story line is great, but it should have been played out longer, and been much more decriptive
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Anonymous04/27/07
needs more
You have a great start to your stories but you really need more detail and more story to it....
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Anonymous04/28/07
Could Use Some Work
While I did love the general idea and plotline of all of the chapters in the series, they all moved too quickly, with not enough detail. In chapters 1 and 2 and somewhat 3, the endings were to abrupt. Overall a good story, however they could definately use a bit of work.
English
too fast
The story line is great, but it should have been played out longer, and been much more decriptive
needs more
You have a great start to your stories but you really need more detail and more story to it....
Could Use Some Work
While I did love the general idea and plotline of all of the chapters in the series, they all moved too quickly, with not enough detail. In chapters 1 and 2 and somewhat 3, the endings were to abrupt. Overall a good story, however they could definately use a bit of work.
Short, fast and hot little series
I enjoyed this series. I was secretly hoping the brother would enjoy Jessica's breast feeding her son - since there is usually milk enough for two.
Quite a quick story
Next time try to make it a bit longer :\
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