Triad Ch. 08

Lovely end to the story. Thank you!
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End? Too soon.

Great story, but a rather abrupt cliche ending. There are many other avenues to go especially with the introduction of life altering events. If you plan on continuing the new events, pregnancy and the changes introduced due to it, then great. If, however, you plan on just dropping it, then I think you are doing a disservice to your readers and what appears to be your philosophy on life. Keep up the wonderful stories you have been weaving!

Great story

This is a great story . Please keep it going with at least 1 more chapter .

jumped the shark

Please take this as constructive criticism. This interesting story kinda fell apart in the last two chapters. It fell off the rails and jumped the shark. A double pregnancy out of the blue? So no concerns over who is the daddy?
It might have been better to step away from the story and come back to it. Seemed in a rush to end it and ruined the characters and the controversial story, IMO.
Please keep writing but maybe take more time if you have a writers block.

Another terrific tale!

Like the way this is going.

Arrowglass

I could not have put it better