One spot that I would correct is when Jamie says, "I want to fuck my brother." Andrea asks a paragraph later, "You know he's your brother, right?" Of course she does - she just said so! It would be better if she'd said, "I want to fuck Jeremy." Other than that it's pretty good! It would be interesting to know why a girl would stop birth control before fucking her brother, but people do stuff I can't understand all the time. Thanks for sharing.
I felt like there was something missing for the 3rd wheel. She let go of that really quickly and quietly, even internal thought wise. Not much anger or depression just "ah well looks like that's how it is"...
I don't know. Just felt off.
But the story was good and I liked it.
English
th kiss
I would have known as soon as we kissed
Hopefully she's pregnant
Very good
Looks like the girlfriend is out in the cold
HOT HOT HOT
This got me all wet and bothered and I'm not even into incest.The only thing I'd have changed is for the brother to NEVER find out.
I liked it!
One spot that I would correct is when Jamie says, "I want to fuck my brother." Andrea asks a paragraph later, "You know he's your brother, right?" Of course she does - she just said so! It would be better if she'd said, "I want to fuck Jeremy." Other than that it's pretty good! It would be interesting to know why a girl would stop birth control before fucking her brother, but people do stuff I can't understand all the time. Thanks for sharing.
the ending
I felt like there was something missing for the 3rd wheel. She let go of that really quickly and quietly, even internal thought wise. Not much anger or depression just "ah well looks like that's how it is"...
I don't know. Just felt off.
But the story was good and I liked it.
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