This was a nice little tale, but there's a blip in it you might want to edit. The story has two of the characters having sex at a certain age that violates a LIT rule. You don't want to get in trouble.
I only mentioned when they started, I was particularly aware not to describe their acts at that age. If we have to write all characters as only losing their virginities after turning 18, that's a bit too restrictive.
Frothy fantasy aspect quite well described but ....
It would have been fun going deeper into ' getting to know all about you' phase. Did the twins get jealous, go into dual powered snits during periods ect ect ? What the author chose to describe was fun to absorb. Ergo my greedy need for more. I thank Leenysman for sharing.
This story was never going to be longer than it is. I managed to write it in a few hours one night, and this is the way it flowed out of me. I am working on a longer piece now. No incest, but I hope it's well received. Keep an eye out for 'Birthday At The Hotel Bar' coming soon.
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Anonymous03/18/16
It got creepy
Specially when the sisters were finishing each other's sentences. However hot they are, it'd definitely give me headaches. It's more like a fetish story.
A very well written, loving and very very arousing story !!! I think this story should be ranked as " Very Special " !!! I have never read a story quite like this, so well balanced, had thoughfulness, cute, caring, honest, loving and of course Hot sex all wrapped into one. You felt like you were actually in the story too. Thank you !!!!!
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Nice work - one blip
This was a nice little tale, but there's a blip in it you might want to edit. The story has two of the characters having sex at a certain age that violates a LIT rule. You don't want to get in trouble.
Re: Blip
I only mentioned when they started, I was particularly aware not to describe their acts at that age. If we have to write all characters as only losing their virginities after turning 18, that's a bit too restrictive.
Frothy fantasy aspect quite well described but ....
It would have been fun going deeper into ' getting to know all about you' phase. Did the twins get jealous, go into dual powered snits during periods ect ect ? What the author chose to describe was fun to absorb. Ergo my greedy need for more. I thank Leenysman for sharing.
Re: Slamdawg
This story was never going to be longer than it is. I managed to write it in a few hours one night, and this is the way it flowed out of me. I am working on a longer piece now. No incest, but I hope it's well received. Keep an eye out for 'Birthday At The Hotel Bar' coming soon.
It got creepy
Specially when the sisters were finishing each other's sentences. However hot they are, it'd definitely give me headaches. It's more like a fetish story.
A very well written, loving and very very arousing story !!! I think this story should be ranked as " Very Special " !!! I have never read a story quite like this, so well balanced, had thoughfulness, cute, caring, honest, loving and of course Hot sex all wrapped into one. You felt like you were actually in the story too. Thank you !!!!!
Excellent story!
While short it was a fantastic story...and probably many guys fantasies.
Excellent work !
Great story nice all around😀
Fantasy come true
Many of us have fantasized about something like this. Lucky man and lucky women.
Outstandin!
Well written, loved te story line! :-)
5 Stars
Love this story
Perfect story...
One of the best...5 stars
5 stars and a permanent HARD ON
Good story. erotic, sexy, and loving
A very cute and loving story, well done
Love it!
This was cute as fuck! Love your short story, wish it was longer
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