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Damn Good Read*****
Great piece of writing I am really enjoying the read. Thanks for sharing.
Other than Nancy whom we really don't know.....
there isn't a decent or likeable character in this mess. Really disappointing work from this author. Even Charley has turned into not a nice guy and as we find out more it appears he's just another rich guy that's used to getting his own way, regardless of the means. And while Bobby may deserve what's coming to him the attitude that Charley can do anything to anyone and get away with it is not good. This is mediocre writing and really not fun to read. Both predictable and not really that good.
too bad
Too bad faith didn't load baby boy's ass with phenobarbitol and save charley having to deal with his worthless ass. Rose Oughta disappear as well.
Well...
This chapter would have fit better in Nonsexual (except I believe all chapters in a series should be in the ONE classification which best fits the main series-theme.)
Good writing, uncomfortable focus!
This is a sex story, right?
We need people knocking boots. Get to it.
Bobby the psycho
Nice story so far. I'd think that Rose would have more savvy than hook up with Bobby the psycho- she's had a life of working deals, building a business, and reading people. Her inner dialogue seems not too for from Bobby's delusions, though- how'd she turn into a shrieking babbling mom so fast, while her daughter keeps all the brains? I don't know if the ladies at the vet clinic knew about Bobby's violent history, but they weren't ready for it. I foresee Bobby ending badly, of course, and I look forward to the next chapters.
How
is Lady Grey? I have a rescue dog with a rod in her leg. A motorcycle ran over her when she was a pup.
Dahfuk Dubby!
WTF cares about a goddamned imaginary cat in a fiction story? Seriously? Are you the male counterpart of the proverbial crazy cat lady? Get out and get some human pussy.
So far a good, though predictable, story. We've read this patent formula a dozen times before.
Very Telling
Swingerjoe is exactly right. This story is dull and not all that well written, but of course it receives a load of five star ratings because it's the 'right' kind of story. And you can tell this by the anons who are threatening to hold their score until they see the ending, so they can go back and 1 bomb the entire story from start to finish if not enough violence or misery is heaped upon a fictional woman for her fictional affair.
They don't judge quality of writing or story telling, or even if a story is sexy or fun. They judge them purely as morality plays, and if the 'cheating whore' isn't sufficiently punished than everything about the story is garbage and shit and not worth their time. Conversely, literally any story by any illiterate fool who strings together a page of broken english and punctuation mistakes is 'the best story on this site in weeks!!!!' if at the end the husband murders his wife or has her gang raped by bums or the like.
Ah Yes FLC
Once again ranting from the rafters like a broken record. You sir are a Fucktard of the highest order.Totally monotonous rant on any story that does not have a husband slurping his wife's lovers leftovers like he would .Sorry q .Pretty good read Not your best but.....
Thanks Q
Always enjoyable reading your stories.
Improving with every episode....
...I'm waiting for Charley to pop and commit a felony. Hat boy is wound pretty tight about now....and trouble comes like a gale......hard and fast.
I'm coming to like several characters more, as I get to know them better. Others....well, I'm like most folks...I like the heroes, hate the dirtbags and wish tundra justice was an option.
that stirred things up a bit
especially the commenters. lol
Timeline sucks..
In chapter one, you had Rose just over 40 with a daughter already leaving college. Chapter two, you have them not even getting married until 26 so that means Rose should at least be 47. You are too good to make these huge mistakes.
the torches are lit
the pitchforks are raised
and the townspeople are about to storm the prison
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