This is a great start. Lots of sexual tension. Did Brenda and Noah plan all this on the side? Were they already lovers?
You have to write more.
I am anxious for Brenda to give herself entirely to Noah. Will she have the best sex ever? Will she want him more than her husband? Will her husband surrender and submit to the two of them, orally and emotionally?
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Anonymous03/27/16
They work in large companies but live in a small town?
It's written realistically, and the pace of the action seems genuine. Start with an innocent handjob and tit flash, and then progress from there. The question is: where does it end?
Welcome to Lit. Thanks for contributing.
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Anonymous03/27/16
Keep up the good work.
If the company is related to agriculture, a big company could be in a smaller town. Story just doesn't say how big.. Look at the site guys. Take the story for what it is, an erotic adventure. Who do you want as an author, Stephen King? I do hope the fun continues into another chapter leading up to a BJ and further "if the husband doesn't get to jealous." Overall a good story. Waiting anxiously for round 2.
for effort and content and to offset the asshole of LIT"s 1 vote!!
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Anonymous03/27/16
Drop the "true" story garbage
It does nothing for the story line and it simply makes us laugh at you. This is a porn site on the world wide web. No one believes a word coming out of your mouth. This story made the characters look really dumb. That, in turn, made the story a lousy read.
YOU old fag just gas yourself!! I'll help turn on the stove. Put your fucking ugly head in the oven dumbass!! Then we'll feed you to the pigs and goats!! hehehe I'm off today so you'll get two of us asshole of LIT! Go eat your cum cereal!!
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Anonymous03/28/16
Great 5* short story.
By the way Noah's cock should have been just one inch longer and a little thicker so it would have really driven Sam and Brenda crazy as she sucked it. Now she has to get a good fucking in the next chapter.
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Anonymous03/28/16
Sam or Brenda
Other comments suggest it's Snipe Week.
A story's a story, and so much for that. slow down a bit, the punctuation's off, and who groups tits when they're on the same body?
High school English, first year.
Why would a man want to share his wife with another man? I mean, he doesn't own her, so he's not sharing her, she's sharing herself. Guess she's still shopping for Mr. Right. Obviously its not her husband.
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Anonymous03/29/16
5
Really hot. Wishing hubby would have been the one to lift her top and be the first to pull her nipples for Noahs excitement.
English
Great Sexual Tension
This is a great start. Lots of sexual tension. Did Brenda and Noah plan all this on the side? Were they already lovers?
You have to write more.
I am anxious for Brenda to give herself entirely to Noah. Will she have the best sex ever? Will she want him more than her husband? Will her husband surrender and submit to the two of them, orally and emotionally?
They work in large companies but live in a small town?
It's the inconsistencies that get to me.
More to cum?
I certainly hope Noah eventually gets Brenda in bed .
HEy the company could have been in another town a few mlies away
And they drove there every work day. You think about it dumbass
Nothing New,...
Good story, however there does not seem to be anything different from any other voyeur / cuckold stories on this site, .....
What is the twist ! ?
Not a bad start
It's written realistically, and the pace of the action seems genuine. Start with an innocent handjob and tit flash, and then progress from there. The question is: where does it end?
Welcome to Lit. Thanks for contributing.
Keep up the good work.
If the company is related to agriculture, a big company could be in a smaller town. Story just doesn't say how big.. Look at the site guys. Take the story for what it is, an erotic adventure. Who do you want as an author, Stephen King? I do hope the fun continues into another chapter leading up to a BJ and further "if the husband doesn't get to jealous." Overall a good story. Waiting anxiously for round 2.
1*
just for the error in the title.
5
for effort and content and to offset the asshole of LIT"s 1 vote!!
Drop the "true" story garbage
It does nothing for the story line and it simply makes us laugh at you. This is a porn site on the world wide web. No one believes a word coming out of your mouth. This story made the characters look really dumb. That, in turn, made the story a lousy read.
Really?
What is your I.Q. 80 ?
It was a fantasy...but...
It was a fantasy...but a dangerous one...he could find himself without wife and best friend...2*
gave it a 5 to suport Bonnie
YOU old fag just gas yourself!! I'll help turn on the stove. Put your fucking ugly head in the oven dumbass!! Then we'll feed you to the pigs and goats!! hehehe I'm off today so you'll get two of us asshole of LIT! Go eat your cum cereal!!
Great 5* short story.
By the way Noah's cock should have been just one inch longer and a little thicker so it would have really driven Sam and Brenda crazy as she sucked it. Now she has to get a good fucking in the next chapter.
Sam or Brenda
Other comments suggest it's Snipe Week.
A story's a story, and so much for that. slow down a bit, the punctuation's off, and who groups tits when they're on the same body?
High school English, first year.
Great story
Great story, please write more. xoxoxo Annette
Off fetish.
Why would a man want to share his wife with another man? I mean, he doesn't own her, so he's not sharing her, she's sharing herself. Guess she's still shopping for Mr. Right. Obviously its not her husband.
5
Really hot. Wishing hubby would have been the one to lift her top and be the first to pull her nipples for Noahs excitement.
More.
Good Story. Good Start.
Well done. This story has a ring of truth to it. Are there going to be other parts to this story? Other stories? Can't wait to find out!
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