Who would want their wedding to be a celebration of a decade of well-nurtured hate? Totally unbelievable. Only the He-Man Women Haters Club here on LW would find this remotely interesting.
Enjoy your ulcers and high blood pressure.
As usual, "flash story" means "I want the violent, angry, reactionary little troglodytes in loving wives to slap me on the back and call me a genius, but I don't actually want to write a story. So I'll throw together the outline of one, have I've character recite it to another as backstory they should both already know with no further development or conflict, tack on a rushed, half assed revenge element and have absolutely no one act like actual human beings. And of course despite being on an erotica site there will be nothing remotely erotic or engaging about it. Brilliant!!!"
And I'm sure the author will get exactly what they want, because the idiots her will lap it up like eager puppies and angrily defend it from anyone who why it's not interesting or engaging or even really a story.
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Anonymous03/19/16
Poorly written, not erotic. Find another site!
Just more crap by another sicko. What is the matter with you? I really shudder to think of what your mind is like if you find this erotic.
The vast majority of negative comments on a "BTB" or "justice for the wronged" as I prefer to call it is from anonymous posters, while even if it is negative commentary, those who support the idea of revenge, BTB, or simply getting away with your life mostly intact (see pretty much anything StangStar has written) actually post a handle or name on their comments?
Personally, I think Literotica would be best served to divide the category into happily cuckolded/swinger/whatever and justice/revenge/BTB, but that's just me. Perhaps even one for the reconcile at all costs group?
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Anonymous03/19/16
Erotica?
I seriously don't understand how this gets accepted on an erotica website. There's nothing erotic about it. Why even bother moderating the stories if anything can get posted?
I would have to agree with Anonymous commenter who said it was stupid to have the wedding day filled with so much hate and vitriol. The wedding day is all about the bride. She wouldn't want to ruin it by having her mother become the focal point. That's why she was kept off the list to begin with. All this does is bring up old wounds. Celebrate the wedding, don't celebrate the hate. There's a time and a place for raking over the coals... the day of the wedding is not it.
This looks more like an outline that should have all the details filled. Obviously a flash story does not have all the details must for a flash story you are better off with one central theme.
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Anonymous03/20/16
Why bother with these jerkoff revenge fantasies?
Your story is poorly written, and not in any way aligned with reality. Get help before you hurt yourself.
I am a justice guy, but first I am a good life kind of guy. A daughters wedding day should be a special day marking what will hopefully be the beginning of a good marriage. It is not a day for revenge, or taking care of dirty business. The timing is off. Also, while some forms of payback are indeed just, putting a lot of effort into them is frequently not worth the results. Live a good life, don't go out of your way for revenge, but if a piece of shit happens to jay walk in front of your car, don't hit the brakes.
The story is just a quickie, written from an author's imagination. The angle is a little different and it was an OK story. I believe that the detractors spent more time ranting about the story than the author did writing it.
A better time to hand out those pictures and tell her story would have been when her mother was making her father's life hell with all the false accusations.
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Anonymous03/20/16
I liked it !
Well Wieliczka , I for one do enjoy a good Flash tale . Although this one wasn't one of the very best posted here , it still beats 90% of the tripe that does get posted !
Anytime our very own Troll Foreskincaster starts ranting and gnashing teeth , you know its pretty good !
4*'s
Cpprcrk
Poor spelling and grammar. Flimsy plot. Ridiculous premise. Not even remotely erotic. Not even remotely fitting the definition of "Loving Wives." Just a complete trainwreck from every angle. But hey, at least it was short!
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Anonymous03/20/16
Write a real story..
This one was a piece of shit. 1*
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Anonymous03/20/16
I see this as a revenge on the cheating bitch story, with the revenge coming from the cheated on child.
Kind of original, to have the child of the slut do the take down. Much more plausible, and painful, than Mexican sex slavery, mutilation, the ex-husband replacing her with a rich fashion model, etc. Because this is how it should be, and easily can be. The cheated on child is ignored or minimized in most of these adultery stories. But who suffers more? The whore wife can be replaced with a good woman. How do you replace your whore of a mother? You can't. Its obvious the whore has no remorse, no honesty, and no self-respect. Why would you want a mother, or a mother-in-law, with such deplorable morals around you, or your children, ever?
So let the bitch live the rest of her life with the choice she made for herself, when she should have been making choices about what was best for her child, and her family. She can enjoy that choice all the way to her grave. Their last contact with her mother should be a photo of them with their new child, enclosed with a sympathy card, regretting her mother's death, by emotional and intellectual suicide. "Our child will never know you're alive, or when you die. Was it worth it?"
Good story, from a perspective almost never explored. Thank You.
two points:
1) I have previously stated. I write BY DESIGN in improper English for 1st person stories. It is more like an individual thinking. It is a personal choice and from this point on, will include that information in the intro. I will not change. If this really bothers you, please do not read my submissions.
2) Thanks for the comments on the children of people who do not not honor their marriage vows. They are the hurt as much as the partners, IF NOT MORE. This tends to be a group that carries the pain of infidelity further that the partners do.
Well done, especially for a flash tale. I wish the grammar and editing were better, but I understand the author's desire for "realistic" dialogue.
Personally, I understand that there may well have been circumstances that precluded the use of a 13-year old daughter's photos of her mother's adultery. Also, using the wedding as the confrontation venue was apparently dictated by the family's awareness of the mother's intent to "crash" the wedding. Not my personal choice, but I can see using the occasion to "clear the air" and set the stage for the next generation's moving on.
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Anonymous03/22/16
That was a nice, neat and complete little package. I enjoy most of your offerings...
...far more than most in this category, because you bring balance (in this case) without any state or federal laws being broken....but exact devastating revenge on those who work evil in a family.
I was especially intrigued by the fact that it was the daughter that was both the first witness to the adultery and the instigator of the well-deserved revenge.
As always, I'll look forward to your next story with as much anticipation as this one offered gratification of the "just desserts" kind.
Thank you.
Nice to see cheaters get what they deserve. Ignore those who criticize without offering something better, Wieliczka. They often have nothing significant to say or add to the conversation.
He left them when she and her sister were 8 and 10. To this day (she's over 30) he is referred to as his first name (whole family is toxic from what I understand). He never showed at the wedding but I have no doubt that she would have called him out if he showed. (Kept my cop friends at the wedding alerted if he did show).
English
Bahahahahahaha
Great story great ending got 5*
Interesting
Interesting. Bad editing made it almost impossible to read. Read it twice and still have only vague idea of the details.
Nice
Revenge is sweet. The hell with the cheaters.
Short and Sweet
Five Stars. Nuff said.
Stupid!
Who would want their wedding to be a celebration of a decade of well-nurtured hate? Totally unbelievable. Only the He-Man Women Haters Club here on LW would find this remotely interesting.
Enjoy your ulcers and high blood pressure.
As usual, "flash story" means "I want the violent, angry, reactionary little troglodytes in loving wives to slap me on the back and call me a genius, but I don't actually want to write a story. So I'll throw together the outline of one, have I've character recite it to another as backstory they should both already know with no further development or conflict, tack on a rushed, half assed revenge element and have absolutely no one act like actual human beings. And of course despite being on an erotica site there will be nothing remotely erotic or engaging about it. Brilliant!!!"
And I'm sure the author will get exactly what they want, because the idiots her will lap it up like eager puppies and angrily defend it from anyone who why it's not interesting or engaging or even really a story.
Poorly written, not erotic. Find another site!
Just more crap by another sicko. What is the matter with you? I really shudder to think of what your mind is like if you find this erotic.
Ever notice?
The vast majority of negative comments on a "BTB" or "justice for the wronged" as I prefer to call it is from anonymous posters, while even if it is negative commentary, those who support the idea of revenge, BTB, or simply getting away with your life mostly intact (see pretty much anything StangStar has written) actually post a handle or name on their comments?
Personally, I think Literotica would be best served to divide the category into happily cuckolded/swinger/whatever and justice/revenge/BTB, but that's just me. Perhaps even one for the reconcile at all costs group?
Erotica?
I seriously don't understand how this gets accepted on an erotica website. There's nothing erotic about it. Why even bother moderating the stories if anything can get posted?
Wedding Day
I would have to agree with Anonymous commenter who said it was stupid to have the wedding day filled with so much hate and vitriol. The wedding day is all about the bride. She wouldn't want to ruin it by having her mother become the focal point. That's why she was kept off the list to begin with. All this does is bring up old wounds. Celebrate the wedding, don't celebrate the hate. There's a time and a place for raking over the coals... the day of the wedding is not it.
I understand the comments about the wedding day...but...
I understand the comments about the wedding day...but where and when would they got the revenge in front of so many people she knew? 3*
Sounds a bit tinny in tone.
This looks more like an outline that should have all the details filled. Obviously a flash story does not have all the details must for a flash story you are better off with one central theme.
Why bother with these jerkoff revenge fantasies?
Your story is poorly written, and not in any way aligned with reality. Get help before you hurt yourself.
Never Go Out of Your Way
I am a justice guy, but first I am a good life kind of guy. A daughters wedding day should be a special day marking what will hopefully be the beginning of a good marriage. It is not a day for revenge, or taking care of dirty business. The timing is off. Also, while some forms of payback are indeed just, putting a lot of effort into them is frequently not worth the results. Live a good life, don't go out of your way for revenge, but if a piece of shit happens to jay walk in front of your car, don't hit the brakes.
This Was Bad*
Sorry.
Vehement critiques!
The story is just a quickie, written from an author's imagination. The angle is a little different and it was an OK story. I believe that the detractors spent more time ranting about the story than the author did writing it.
Move along folks...
...nothing interesting to see here.
Why did she wait years for this?
A better time to hand out those pictures and tell her story would have been when her mother was making her father's life hell with all the false accusations.
I liked it !
Well Wieliczka , I for one do enjoy a good Flash tale . Although this one wasn't one of the very best posted here , it still beats 90% of the tripe that does get posted !
Anytime our very own Troll Foreskincaster starts ranting and gnashing teeth , you know its pretty good !
4*'s
Cpprcrk
What a Trainwreck
Poor spelling and grammar. Flimsy plot. Ridiculous premise. Not even remotely erotic. Not even remotely fitting the definition of "Loving Wives." Just a complete trainwreck from every angle. But hey, at least it was short!
Write a real story..
This one was a piece of shit. 1*
I see this as a revenge on the cheating bitch story, with the revenge coming from the cheated on child.
Kind of original, to have the child of the slut do the take down. Much more plausible, and painful, than Mexican sex slavery, mutilation, the ex-husband replacing her with a rich fashion model, etc. Because this is how it should be, and easily can be. The cheated on child is ignored or minimized in most of these adultery stories. But who suffers more? The whore wife can be replaced with a good woman. How do you replace your whore of a mother? You can't. Its obvious the whore has no remorse, no honesty, and no self-respect. Why would you want a mother, or a mother-in-law, with such deplorable morals around you, or your children, ever?
So let the bitch live the rest of her life with the choice she made for herself, when she should have been making choices about what was best for her child, and her family. She can enjoy that choice all the way to her grave. Their last contact with her mother should be a photo of them with their new child, enclosed with a sympathy card, regretting her mother's death, by emotional and intellectual suicide. "Our child will never know you're alive, or when you die. Was it worth it?"
Good story, from a perspective almost never explored. Thank You.
Thanks for the Comments
two points:
1) I have previously stated. I write BY DESIGN in improper English for 1st person stories. It is more like an individual thinking. It is a personal choice and from this point on, will include that information in the intro. I will not change. If this really bothers you, please do not read my submissions.
2) Thanks for the comments on the children of people who do not not honor their marriage vows. They are the hurt as much as the partners, IF NOT MORE. This tends to be a group that carries the pain of infidelity further that the partners do.
Great story
Well done, especially for a flash tale. I wish the grammar and editing were better, but I understand the author's desire for "realistic" dialogue.
Personally, I understand that there may well have been circumstances that precluded the use of a 13-year old daughter's photos of her mother's adultery. Also, using the wedding as the confrontation venue was apparently dictated by the family's awareness of the mother's intent to "crash" the wedding. Not my personal choice, but I can see using the occasion to "clear the air" and set the stage for the next generation's moving on.
That was a nice, neat and complete little package. I enjoy most of your offerings...
...far more than most in this category, because you bring balance (in this case) without any state or federal laws being broken....but exact devastating revenge on those who work evil in a family.
I was especially intrigued by the fact that it was the daughter that was both the first witness to the adultery and the instigator of the well-deserved revenge.
As always, I'll look forward to your next story with as much anticipation as this one offered gratification of the "just desserts" kind.
Thank you.
Complete....
Nice to see cheaters get what they deserve. Ignore those who criticize without offering something better, Wieliczka. They often have nothing significant to say or add to the conversation.
I have a daughter-in-law who hates her father
He left them when she and her sister were 8 and 10. To this day (she's over 30) he is referred to as his first name (whole family is toxic from what I understand). He never showed at the wedding but I have no doubt that she would have called him out if he showed. (Kept my cop friends at the wedding alerted if he did show).
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