A Strong Family Bond Ch. 01

Bad and too short

My title says it all.

Great story

gave you a 5 for effort and content

Come on

you can do better than this. What about some actual sex? 1*

Identical twins have the same color eyes and hair....just saying

Need a strategy and an editor

I'm all up for some quality futa story but this is noting of the like, at best it could pass as intro part of a chapter. And even that only after an editor chewed through it. As it stands It gets nothing more than 1* from me.

It is like an intro
Looks like it has potential so keep it going.

A strong family bond Ch. 1

You're really stretching the superlatives, aren't you?
from "future baby daddy" which is a stupid adjective to begin with, to "Prince Charming"? I don't really thing you'll find a "baby daddy" working as a butcher. Not a legitimate butcher.
He gets her pregnant at 18. That's acceptable. Many different man from the age of consent to 18, well, there's a really committed lady who understands how pregnancy occurs.
Geez, if it has a cock, it's a boy.. Yes I saw vagina there too, but I had to quit reading, I was laughing too hard. My girl friend split her tummy.

And...

And this was supposed to be... what, exactly?

Eh ?

This is shit .., but Im prepared to give you a 2nd chance lol . Youve disappointed a lot of fellow perves here my friend , its looked like it was going to be good ( I love Hermaph stories lol )
As for the asshole that claims twins have the same colored hair , what the fuck is your problem lol
Come on Mister carry this on please : )))

Superlatives ?

Does that one Poster know what a Superlative is ? EG :
Big = adjective
Bigger = Comparative
Biggest = Superlative
I dont know how any fellow reader here worries the fu5k about grammer etc , and come on tell me, who is going to ask anyone to proof read thier work here or get some one to edit it ?? We'd be locked up forever lol
So cmon guys relax , let the man carry the story on and stop peeing in your pants about if it should be a full stop, comma or fuc5k knows what or if ID twins should have the same hiar colour lol jeeeeezzzz........

More?

I agree this was much to short. Need to develop it more and I will be checking back to see if you post more chapters, and I hope you do. To the anonymous that posted that if it has a cock it is a male. I'm guessing you never have had anything to do with a hermaphrodite. Genetics dictate if they develop a male or female physique, but it isn't like it is a choice they can make.

A strong family bond

I liked it so far, but hope you finish it

more please

This is a start but we need to hear more details of the twins adventures.

A Reason For the Shortness

As I have mentioned, this is a test story, more experimental than anything. The reason it was short is because I had assumed I could add onto it, however that turned out to be wrong. Learning from this, the next chapters will be longer, and I guarantee, sexier.